Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans compare between the public Grange park when it first opened in 1920 and now.

Overall, the data shows that there were a lot of changes in the Grange park from 1920 to these days ,However there are the intraces are still the same and wasten north rose garden.

In 1920, directly at the right of the entrance of the Eldon street there was the Glasshouse ,walking stright a few steps there were some seats, continuing stright there were a Pond for water and a rose garden, in the right of the other intrance in the Arnold avenue there was seats the rose garden and more seats , infront of it there was stage for musicians ,going stright to a rose garden between two seats.When the visitots inter from both interance it faced them the fountain in the centre of the park.

Nowadays, everything changed except the entraces and the wasten north rose garden, the other one was shifted to the centre suronded by seats , in the place of the other rose garden there is now a caffee next to a area for the kids to play.In the right of the intrance there snow a water feature and in the left an Emphitheatre for concerts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from the original layout to the present park and give an overview that the entrances and north-west rose garden remain. You also report several relevant changes, including the central rose garden surrounded by seats, the café, play area, amphitheatre and water feature. However, some locations are confused or unclear: the 1920 pond was in the north-east, while the rose garden was along the northern edge east of the entrance; the glasshouse was south-east, not simply “at the right” of the Eldon Street entrance. The present-day description also omits the children’s play area’s position and the underground car-park entrance. Covering the key features more precisely and developing the comparisons more evenly would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the 1920 plan and the present layout. This gives the reader a basic chronological progression. However, the long 1920 sentence strings together many locations with repeated forms such as “straight” and “there were,” making the route difficult to follow. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the other one” and “in the right of the entrance,” so readers must infer which feature or entrance is meant. Use shorter sentences organised by area—for example, north, centre and south—and clearer linking phrases such as “in contrast” or “in the south-east.” This would make the comparisons easier to track and reduce the mechanical sequencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “centre,” “surrounded by seats,” “entrance,” and “water feature,” which helps communicate the main changes. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description less precise: “intraces” is difficult to recognise, “wasten” appears to mean “western,” and “walking straight a few steps” is not a natural way to locate a feature on a plan. “Everything changed” is also too broad when some features remained. Aim for accurate location language and standard spellings, and use terms such as “north-east corner,” “along the southern edge,” and “was replaced by.” These choices would make the account clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including comparisons between the two plans, but control is inconsistent. For example, “there was the Glasshouse” and “there were a Pond” show problems with articles and agreement, while “the entrances are still the same” shifts tense within a past-to-present comparison. Several sentences are joined with commas rather than being separated, especially the long description beginning “In 1920,” which makes grammatical relationships hard to follow. There are also unclear sentence patterns such as “When the visitors enter … it faced them the fountain.” Practise forming accurate location sentences in the past and present, and use full stops to separate distinct features. More reliable sentence control would make your comparisons easier to understand.

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