Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given diagram illustrates the planning of Grange park in 1920 and comparison with today.
Overall, the first given data of park that was built on 1920. The park structure was contains there were 5 seating area, 3 rose gardens, 2 entrance, in the middle fountain beside the stage for musicians, glasshouse and in the corner pond for water plants.
On the other hands, today the park condition is totally based on the modern style. That park structure nowadays is the rose garden is 1 instead of 3 also reduce the entrance has 2, seating area has 4, rose garden has 1, stage for musicians was replaced with the amphitheatre for concerts, glasshouse was replaced with water feature and pond was replaced with children play area and also iclude the underground entrance for car parking.
Finally, there are many changes seen from the previous plan and today's park is based on the modern designed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the two time periods and mention several important changes, including the replacement of the musicians’ stage by an amphitheatre, the pond by a children’s play area, and the glasshouse by a water feature. However, the overview is not clear or accurate enough: the park is described as “totally based on the modern style,” rather than summarising its main spatial changes. Some details are also misreported. The central rose garden is not the only rose garden today; the north-west garden remains, and the café occupies the site of another former rose garden. The seating areas are not clearly compared, either. Select the most significant changes and describe their locations accurately to make the summary more complete and informative.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from the 1920 plan to the present and then to a concluding sentence. This gives the reader a general sense of the comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because many features are packed into long, list-like sentences, especially the paragraph beginning “On the other hands.” The repeated use of “also” and the unclear sequence of counts make relationships between features hard to track. Organise the information by area or by major changes—for example, central and western features, then the northern and southern edges—and use clear comparison links such as “whereas” and “in contrast.”
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “rose gardens,” “fountain,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature,” so the reader can recognise many of the mapped features. However, the range is limited and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “first given data,” “park condition,” and “modern designed.” Repetition of “park structure” and “replaced” also makes the account less flexible. Take care to use accurate labels and natural collocations: for example, describe the park’s “layout” and say that one feature “was replaced by” another. More precise location vocabulary, such as “in the north-east corner” or “along the southern edge,” would also strengthen the comparison.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent. Errors in the opening—“the planning of Grange park in 1920 and comparison with today”—and “the first given data of park that was built on 1920” make the intended meaning awkward. There are also problems with verb forms and agreement in “the park structure was contains” and “the park condition is totally based,” as well as article and plural use in “the rose garden is 1.” The long sentence listing present-day features is difficult to manage grammatically. Use shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then practise accurate past and present forms when comparing the plans.
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