Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrates a Grange public park in 1920 and at present.

Overall, the park has been transformed with alot of features such as theatre, cafe, children's play area and more compared to the 1920s.

In 1920, park has two entrances, one from the arnold avenue and other one is from the eldon street. If you enter the park from the arnold street, you would see rose garden on both left and right side of the entrance gate. Beside rose water, there's water plant ponds at the corner. And if you enter the park from eldon street, you would have find, rose garden on your left and glasshous on the right. There are many seats available at the park in-between areas at all sides. There's was also a fountain in the middle if the park and stage for musicians was right next to it on the left.

On the other hand, today's park structure is a bit difference. Althought both entrances are same as old that is one from the arnold avanue and other is from the eldon street. If tou enter the park from arnold avanue, you can see rose garden on the right side, whereas cafe is launched that is on the left side. Beside cafe, on the corner children's play area is available wgere parents can leave their children to play. If you enter the park from the elson street, you will find, water feature on the right side and below it is the unground entrance for car park. There's one more rose garden that is in the middle of the park surrounded by seats all over and right next to it on the west side is amphitheatre for concerts where concerts and musical nights will be held.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both the 1920 plan and the present-day layout, and you identify several important changes, including the replacement of the pond by a play area, the glasshouse by a water feature, and the central fountain by a rose garden. The overview recognises that the park has been transformed, but it is broad rather than highlighting the main pattern of change and continuity. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the northern rose garden was not on both sides of the entrance, and the present-day central rose garden is surrounded by seats, rather than simply being described as “in the middle.” You also omit the north-west rose garden’s continuity and the removal of the south-west garden. A more selective, precise comparison would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two time periods. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. You also use signposting such as “In 1920,” “On the other hand,” and “whereas” to distinguish the plans and show contrast. However, the repeated directions to imagine entering from each street make the report feel like a tour rather than a concise comparison, and some links are awkward or unclear, such as “Beside rose water” and “Beside cafe, on the corner.” Grouping changes by location or by what was replaced would create a more direct progression. Use referencing carefully so readers can identify which feature or entrance each description refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for describing park features, including “fountain,” “ponds,” “glasshouse,” “water feature,” and “amphitheatre,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited by repeated everyday wording such as “you would see,” “you will find,” and “available.” Several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a formal map report: “launched” does not describe the café’s location, “rose water” appears to mean rose garden, and “underground entrance” is less precise than “entrance to the underground car park.” Spelling errors such as “glasshous” and “avanue” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise location language and a more formal reporting style, while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and conditional descriptions beginning “If you enter…”. These structures help convey locations, but some errors recur in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “In 1920, park has two entrances” needs an article and past tense; “you would have find” has an incorrect verb form; and “There’s was also” combines incompatible forms. The present-tense descriptions also shift between “is” and “was,” making time reference less controlled. Some long sentences joined with commas are difficult to manage. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions of the 1920 plan and present-tense descriptions of today, and check each sentence for a complete, correctly formed clause.

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