Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The mape illustrate the public park change in 1920 to present .

Overall, the park significant modern , with several new addad facilities , some original features including the stage musician , pond for the water plants have been removed or replaced .

In 1920 , grange parks containes three rose park , a central fountain and a atage for musicains . there was also a water ponds in notherns side, a glass house east side , while the seats eadge of garden .

Today , grange park has modern , the fountain has been repalced the rose garden , while the pond water replaced the childerns play area , and some new add features like , water feature and amphitheatre for concerts replaced of stage of musician . the park still has entrance from both street .

in conclusion , grange park has changed traditional vs modern .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main change from a traditional park to a more modern one and mention several accurate comparisons, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond being replaced by a children’s play area, and the addition of an amphitheatre. However, the account is only partial: it does not clearly describe the café, the underground car-park entrance, or the seats surrounding the central garden, and the overview is vague. The statement that the stage and pond were removed or replaced is broadly relevant, but the stage’s replacement is not explained precisely. The response is also one word below the required minimum. To develop the report, give a clearer overview and cover the most significant changes and retained features more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about the original park, and a paragraph about the present layout. This helps the reader follow the basic comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and the final “in conclusion” repeats the general idea that the park has changed without adding a useful summary. Linking is limited and sometimes awkward, as in “while the pond water replaced the childerns play area,” which makes the relationship between features difficult to follow. Organise the details by location or by major changes, and use clear comparison links such as “whereas,” “in contrast,” and “while” accurately. This would make the sequence more coherent and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “glass house,” “water feature,” and “amphitheatre.” These terms show awareness of the task’s subject, but the range is limited and several choices or forms make the description unclear. Examples include “rose park” for “rose gardens,” “water ponds,” and “the park has modern.” There are also frequent spelling errors, such as “repalced,” “childerns,” and “musicians,” which reduce precision. Aim to use accurate map-description phrases, for example “is located in the north-east corner” and “was replaced by,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish additions from replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to use longer sentences and comparisons, including “there was also a water ponds … while the seats…” and the sentence describing the fountain and pond changes. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make relationships hard to understand. For example, “Overall, the park significant modern” lacks a correctly formed verb, while “the fountain has been repalced the rose garden” is missing the preposition needed to express replacement. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent in “the park … containes” and “the park still has entrance.” Use straightforward, complete sentences first, with a clear subject and verb, then check articles, plurals, prepositions, and past-tense forms.

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