Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams illustrate the blueprints of Grange park, which was initially inaugrated in 1920s and compares the architecture since it's launch to the present day.

Overall, Grange park has seen some dramatic transformations throughout the time period. It has gone from being a visiting site with a glasshouse and a fountain to a much more of a children's friendly area with a cafe and water slide.

Since it's inaugration, the stage area for musicians has been inagurated to an amphitheatre for larger concerts. The most strinking change is the replacement of the center fountain with the relocation of the three rose gardens in the centre which has seats all around it. The glass house has been converted into a water slide area which now connects with the underground parking spot.

The pond has been reconstructed into a children's play area and at the west of it, a cafe has been made which was previously a rose garden.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the conversion of the musicians’ stage into an amphitheatre, the pond into a children’s play area, and the former glasshouse site into a water feature. The overview also recognises that the park has become more family-oriented. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the central rose garden did not result from relocating three gardens; it replaced the fountain, while the north-west garden remained and other gardens were removed. The feature in the south-east is a water feature, not a water slide, and the underground car park entrance is indicated nearby rather than connected to it. The café’s location is also described as west of the play area, whereas it is along the northern edge. More precise comparisons would make the account more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. This gives the reader a sensible route through the information, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Since its inauguration” help signal the stages of the description. However, the final paragraph’s “at the west of it” is an unclear reference, and the sequence of features does not consistently guide the reader around the plan. Some links are also awkward, particularly “which now connects with the underground parking spot,” where the relationship between the water feature and car-park entrance is not clear. Grouping changes by area—for example, northern, central, and southern features—and using more precise references would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to maps, including “blueprints,” “transformations,” “replacement,” and “converted,” and the reader can generally understand the changes you intend to describe. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this task. “Visiting site” does not clearly describe a public park, “water slide” misidentifies the labelled water feature, and “relocation” incorrectly suggests the rose gardens were moved. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “inaugrated,” “inagurated,” and “strinking,” as well as inconsistent spelling of “cafe/café.” Use the exact map labels where possible and choose precise verbs such as “replaced,” “remained,” and “was converted into” to improve accuracy and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of sentence forms, including a complex overview sentence and clauses describing how features changed, so the response shows some grammatical range. Most meanings remain understandable, but some errors and awkward constructions reduce clarity. In the introduction, “which was initially inaugurated in 1920s and compares” has an unclear subject and mismatched structure; a clearer version would be “The plans compare the park when it opened in 1920 with its present layout.” The phrase “a much more of a children’s friendly area” has faulty article and modifier structure, while “the replacement of the center fountain with the relocation” creates an unclear grammatical relationship. Review articles, possessives, and clause construction, and use consistent past and present forms when comparing the two plans.

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