Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The two provided plans below illustrate a public park at the time when it initially opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, it is immediately apparent that there are many changes that have been developed such as a water feature in the southeast of the park and a rose garden in the middle of the park.

There was a stage for musicians in the left side of the park which has been replaced by an amphitheatre for concerts. Additionally, there were three rose gardens, Later, two of them have been demolished. A rose garden with four seats have been built in the middle of the park instead of a fountain. A cafe has been erected in the place of one of the rose garden which was located in the north side of the park.

There was a pond for water plants in the northeast of the park which has converted into a children´s play area. A water feature has been constructed in the southeast of the park in the place of a glasshouse. Ultimately, an underground car park has been built adjacent to the water feature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the main transformation from the 1920 layout to the present and gives a clear overview, noting the central rose garden and the new south-eastern water feature. It also accurately compares the former stage with the concert amphitheatre, the pond with the play area, and the glasshouse site with the water feature. This coverage addresses the task well. Some details are less fully reported: the north-west rose garden remains, and the café replaces the northern rose garden east of the entrance, but the response does not clarify that the other rose garden was in the south-west. The statement that the underground car park is “adjacent to the water feature” is broadly grounded in the plan, though its entrance is the key feature shown. A more precise overview and fuller location comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a generally logical sequence, moving from an overview to changes in the western and central areas, then to the north-east and south-east. Linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “instead of,” and “which has converted” help show comparisons between the two plans. However, the response is presented as one long body paragraph after the introduction, so the main features are not clearly grouped into separate stages or areas. Some transitions are also mechanical, particularly the repeated “There was … which has …” pattern, and “Ultimately” does not express a meaningful final relationship here. Use a separate overview paragraph and group related changes by location, with more varied and precise referencing, to make progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for describing the map, and the writer uses relevant terms such as “amphitheatre,” “southeast,” “pond for water plants,” and “underground car park.” These choices communicate the main changes, while phrases such as “in the place of” show an attempt to express replacement. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “changes that have been developed” is not a natural way to describe alterations to a park, and “demolished” is less suitable for gardens that have simply been removed. “Built” and “erected” are also repeated or not ideal for features such as a garden or play area. Greater control of map-description collocations and more precise verbs would add flexibility and polish.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, including relative clauses such as “which has been replaced by an amphitheatre” and “which was located in the north side.” Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. In “There was a stage … which has been replaced,” the past-to-present comparison is understandable, though the tense sequence could be handled more consistently. There are clearer problems in “which has converted into a children’s play area” (missing passive auxiliary) and “A rose garden with four seats have been built” (subject–verb agreement). The sentence beginning “Additionally” also has an unnecessary capital after the comma and an awkward tense shift. Practise passive forms and agreement, and proofread punctuation and tense choices.

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