Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The map illustrates the layout of the public park, how it looks when it was open first time in 1920 and how it looks today.

Overall, the park was significantly redeveloped, with several new facilities being added and existing features being removed. In the central area of the park fountain romoved and it was converted into rose garden, while new cafe was added.

First looking at the northern side of the layout, entrance is same, while rose garden that located on the right side of the entrance has been removed and new cafe is introduced. Pond for water plants converted into the children's play area, while seats and glass house has been removed and new water feature is introduced.

Turning to the central area oof the park, the fountain has been replaced with a rose garden and new seats are installed around the rose garden.

On the western side of the layout stage for musicians has been replaced with amphitheatre for concerts. New underground parking has been introduced.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You provide a clear overview of substantial redevelopment, identifying the central fountain’s replacement by a rose garden and the addition of a café. Several comparisons are also accurate: the former pond becomes a children’s play area, and the musicians’ stage is replaced by a concert amphitheatre. This gives the response a clear focus on the main changes. However, some details are inaccurate or incomplete: the seats and glasshouse were not removed as a group—the glasshouse was replaced by a water feature, while seats remain in several areas. The underground car-park entrance is in the south-east, not on the western side. You also omit the north-west rose garden’s continued presence and the southern entrance. More precise coverage of these features would make the account more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs organised around areas of the park. Phrases such as “Overall,” “First looking at the northern side,” and “Turning to the central area” help signal progression, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement. To make the progression more consistently clear, organise the details by location and cover the whole plan, including the southern area, rather than moving from the north to the centre and then west while mentioning a south-east feature in the western section. Some linking is also mechanical, and the final paragraph combines unrelated locations. Clearer grouping and more precise references would strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “redeveloped,” “converted,” “replaced,” and “introduced.” These choices help communicate the main transformations, and terms such as “children’s play area” and “amphitheatre for concerts” are relevant to the plan. However, some word choices and collocations are imprecise: “fountain removed” and “seats are installed” do not describe the changes as naturally as “was replaced” and “were added.” There are also spelling errors, including “romoved” and “oof,” and “glass house” is conventionally written as “glasshouse” here. Aim for accurate, consistent change vocabulary and proofread spelling; this would make the description more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses linked with “while,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction recur. For example, “how it looks when it was open first time” mixes tenses and omits an article; “fountain romoved and it was converted” lacks a correctly formed passive verb; and “seats and glass house has been removed” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence beginning “First looking at” is also awkwardly constructed. Use consistent past and present forms when comparing the two plans, and check articles and agreement. More accurate control of these basic patterns would improve clarity.

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