Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans show the changes made in a public park when it first opened in 1920 and how it looks today.

Overall, there are several changes done in the park. The main features are amphitheatre and water feature has been added to the park. Some facilities are relocated such as rose garden and seats, while entrances remain as it was in 1920.

In 1920, there was a fountain in the middle of the park which has now been replaced with rose garden. Rose garden in the south-west side was now been removed. Seats in the western side of the park was now relocated around rose garden in the center of the park.

Rose garden in the northern side of the park was now been occupied by Cafe. Water feature has been added in the eastern side of the park where glasshouse was previously located. Underground car park was added just beside the water feature to provide the parking, also entrance has been made from car parking. While both the other entrances remain same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation in the centre: the fountain has been replaced by a rose garden, and you mention the new amphitheatre and water feature. You also compare the former glasshouse site with its current use and note that the two street entrances remain. However, some important changes are omitted or only partly described: the north-east pond becomes a children’s play area, the café replaces the northern rose garden, and the underground car-park entrance is in the south-east corner. The overview also says seats were relocated around the central garden, but does not mention that seats remain elsewhere. Covering these changes more fully and precisely would make the summary more complete and better balanced. (The response meets the task’s length requirement.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a clear basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing changes. The sequence from the central area to the northern and eastern parts is generally understandable, and phrases such as “where glasshouse was previously located” help connect past and present. However, the progression is not fully systematic: the western changes are mentioned briefly, while several northern and north-eastern features are left out. Some linking is awkward or repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “now” and the final sentence beginning “While”. Grouping the information by area and using clearer contrasts such as “whereas” or “in contrast” would make the organisation more coherent and the connections between details easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a map, including “replaced”, “relocated”, “previously located” and “entrances remain”. These choices communicate several changes clearly. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “changes done” is not a natural collocation, “the main features are amphitheatre and water feature has been added” is awkward, and “provide the parking” is not idiomatic. The response also repeats “rose garden”, “park” and “added” rather than varying the descriptions. Aim for precise map language such as “introduced”, “converted into”, “situated” and “occupies”, while checking articles and natural word combinations. This would improve flexibility and precision without sacrificing clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including relative clauses such as “where glasshouse was previously located” and a contrast introduced by “While”. The main relationships between past and present are usually understandable. However, some errors in agreement, verb forms and articles recur. For example, “the main features … has been added” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “was now been removed” and “was now been occupied” use an incorrect verb construction. “Seats … was now relocated” also has a subject–verb agreement error. The final “While both the other entrances remain same” is an incomplete sentence. Practise accurate passive forms (“has been removed”) and complete contrast clauses; this will help you retain sentence variety with better control.

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