Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The following diagram illustrate, the condition of local park when first opened in 1920 and what it looks today .

Overall,there is more facilities in today like cafes and addition of car parking underground. Moreover, in past there was no clear place for childrens to play but now highlighted a specific area for childs.

Furthermore, In 1920 there was a fountain in the centre of park between the entrance for peoples.,but now the area of fountain was used for garden and sitting area.Addittionaly, in 1920 there is a small place for stage sorrounded by Rose gardens , but, now a biggest stadium theatre was build in tht place. However, In past no shops and cafes was in the park.Now a days, In left side of main entrance there is childrens playing area as well as a water fetures also present there. Although the park had not too much changed but the extra place for parking is now built under the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from a central fountain to a garden with seating, and you note the new underground car-park entrance and children’s play area. These are relevant comparisons and support a general overview of how the park has changed. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the stage was west of the fountain, not “between the entrance[s],” and the play area is in the north-east, not simply “left side of main entrance.” The amphitheatre replaces the western stage and south-west garden, while the café and water feature also deserve clearer comparison with the former rose garden and glasshouse. Your claim that the park “had not too much changed” is also too general given these substantial alterations. Select and explain the key changes more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable overview followed by a paragraph of details, so the reader can recognise a basic structure. However, progression within the detail paragraph is difficult to follow: it moves from the centre to the western area, then to the café, play area, water feature and car park without a clear spatial or thematic order. Linking words such as “Furthermore,” “Additionally,” “However,” and “Although” are frequent, but some do not express the relationship accurately, and several sentences run together without adequate spacing or punctuation. Grouping changes by area—for example, northern features, central and western features, then southern features—would make comparisons easier to track. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing would also improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “rose gardens,” “stage,” “cafes,” and “underground” parking. This gives the response a minimally adequate range, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural and sometimes make the intended feature unclear. For example, “stadium theatre” does not accurately describe an amphitheatre, and “water fetures” is an inaccurate spelling of “water feature.” “The condition of local park” and “a biggest stadium theatre” are also awkward expressions. There are repeated basic terms such as “place” and “area,” which could be replaced with more specific location language. Aim to use the map’s exact labels and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “Although,” and use past and present forms to compare the two plans. However, errors occur frequently across the response and can make relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “The following diagram illustrate” (subject–verb agreement), “what it looks today” (missing auxiliary), and “there is more facilities” (agreement and tense). Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in phrases such as “centre of park” and “for peoples.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention: the opening has an unnecessary comma, while several later sentences contain run-on punctuation or missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then build longer comparisons with controlled tense and agreement.

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