Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plan compares how the public parks where when it was first opened in the year 1920 , and also in the recent year. overall, the 1920 there where two entrance same with the recently used one . in 1920 the buildings werent well furnished like the recent one. After the construction the recent one contained a cafe,entrance underground car park, rose garden with 4 seats rounding it , water features, childrens play area then the Amphitheatre for concerts, all these where the changes that made them different from the accent public park used in 1920.

when the park was first opened in 1920 it had a fountain which is not in the recent building . also, there was a glass house which is not in the recent public park, the stage for musicaian in 1920 was replaced with the theatre after the development took place. the ponds for water plants where replaced with childrens play area . In summary the recent buliding of the garage park is more developed than the recent one .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the fountain by a central rose garden, the pond by a children’s play area, and the musicians’ stage by an amphitheatre. You also note that the two entrances remain. However, the overview is unclear and includes an unsupported claim that the park’s buildings were “not well furnished” in 1920. Some details are inaccurate or imprecise: the central rose garden is surrounded by seats, rather than “4 seats,” and the café and water feature are not clearly compared with the former northern rose garden and glasshouse. The final sentence is also contradictory, saying the park is more developed than “the recent one.” A clearer overview of the main transformations, followed by accurate location-based comparisons, would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure: it begins with a general comparison, then describes several changes, and ends with a summary. This gives the reader some sense of the topic. However, progression is weak because the first paragraph lists new features without organising them by location or grouping them with the features they replaced. The second paragraph repeats some of the same changes, such as the stage becoming an amphitheatre and the pond becoming a play area. Linking phrases such as “also” and “In summary” are used, but they do not always clarify relationships, and the final summary is difficult to interpret. Organise the report into a concise overview and paragraphs comparing the northern, central, and other areas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a park, including “fountain,” “glass house,” “ponds for water plants,” “children’s play area,” and “Amphitheatre for concerts.” This shows a basic range suited to the task. However, several word choices or forms are inaccurate and sometimes make the meaning unclear: “recent building” and “recent public park” are not natural ways to describe the present-day plan, while “accent public park” appears to be an incorrect word. “Theatre” is also less precise than “amphitheatre” for the feature shown. Spelling and apostrophe errors, including “musicaian,” “childrens,” and “werent,” are noticeable. Use precise map vocabulary and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “the stage for musicaian in 1920 was replaced with the theatre after the development took place.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, tense, agreement, and punctuation frequently distract the reader. The opening phrase “The plan compares how the public parks where” is not grammatically complete, and “overall, the 1920 there where two entrance” has faulty word order, verb agreement, and plural form. The final sentence also compares the park with itself, making the intended meaning unclear. Commas are often misplaced or missing, and capitalisation is inconsistent. Practise accurate past-versus-present comparisons and build clear sentences around a subject and verb before adding detail.

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