Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The maps illustrate the development of the Grange park at present, since it was first opened in 1920.

Overall, there are significant changes has been taken, while the size of the park and entrances to the park has remained same. Also, there are some additions of leisure facilities for adults and children.

In 1920, the fountain was located in the centre of the park just in front of both entrances has been replaced by a large size of rose garden at present. Likewise, the seats for public to relax, which was situated around the border line in 1920 are now have emerged all around the rose garden. the stage for musicians was on the left hand side before, has now converted into advanced amphitheater for concerts.

Futhermore, the pond for water plants was on right corner of the park in 1920 has now replaced by the children's play ground, to make leisure place for children to enjoy. Similarly, bottom-right corner of the park has renewed by water feature

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation in the centre: the fountain is replaced by a rose garden, with seats arranged around it, and you compare the western performance area and north-east corner across the two maps. The overview also notes that the park’s size and entrances remain unchanged and that leisure facilities have been added. However, some important changes are omitted, including the café, the underground car-park entrance, the retained north-west rose garden, and the former glasshouse’s replacement by a water feature. The final comparison is also incomplete: you mention the water feature but do not clearly state what it replaced. Covering these features and making the overview more precise would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing changes, with a generally sensible movement from the centre and west to the north-east and south-east. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Likewise,” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships between points. However, some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “the fountain … has been replaced” followed by “Likewise,” where the relationship between the features is not quite parallel. The final sentence ends without a clear comparison to the former glasshouse, and the paragraphing leaves several map changes unreported. Use clearer topic grouping and explicit before-and-after links to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “pond for water plants,” “leisure facilities,” and “amphitheater for concerts,” so the reader can follow the main changes. There are also attempts at more descriptive phrasing, such as “border line” and “renewed by.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “large size of rose garden,” “seats for public to relax,” and “advanced amphitheater” do not express the intended information naturally. “Renewed by water feature” is also an unclear collocation. Spelling errors such as “Futhermore” and “amphitheater” (inconsistent with the standard spelling “amphitheatre” used in the map) reduce accuracy. Prefer precise, conventional terms for describing locations and replacements.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with relative clauses, as in “the seats for public to relax, which was situated around the border line.” This shows some range, but several sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, or clause construction. For example, “there are significant changes has been taken” combines incompatible structures, while “the size of the park and entrances … has remained same” has agreement and article problems. In “the fountain … has been replaced … has been replaced” the sentence structure is also incomplete or confused, and “the stage … was …, has now converted” lacks the correct passive form. Aim to build accurate sentences around clear subjects and verbs, then add subordinate clauses once the basic structure is secure.

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