Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps present a community park which first opened for public in 1920 and the eact same park now.

Overall, both of the maps shows the exact same entrances of the park. In the recent map, they have added a cafe and the children's play space. The old picture of the map doesn't have any parkin space. However, the new park has an underground car park.

The past layout of the park was pretty simple. It had a large water fountain in the middle and some rose gardens in three corners of the park. It also had a greenhouse in one corner near the entrance from Eldon Street. They had also builded a stage for musicians near the fountain. It even has a pond for the plants.

The recent map of the cummunity park is very well-designed. It has a major rose garden in the center of the park and some seating for the public around it. They have now converted the stage into an Amphitheatre for concerts in the park. New park layout also has a restraunt and a playarea for the kids.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation from a fountain to a central rose garden, and note several important additions, including the café, play area and underground car park. You also compare the former stage with the present amphitheatre and mention the earlier pond and glasshouse. However, some features are described imprecisely: the three rose gardens were not simply “in three corners,” and the glasshouse was along the southern edge, not clearly “in one corner near” the entrance. The overview focuses on entrances and additions but misses other major changes, such as the loss of the pond and glasshouse and the new water feature. Develop the comparisons more systematically and report the locations accurately to make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the former and current layouts. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and phrases such as “The past layout” and “The recent map” help signal the shift between time periods. However, the overview is not fully effective because it lists selected additions without summarising the most significant overall changes. Some links between details are also loose: “It even has a pond for the plants” follows the stage and greenhouse details without a clear spatial or comparative connection. Grouping features by area or pairing each former feature with its replacement would create a more consistent progression and make the comparisons more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing the park, including “converted,” “rose gardens,” “underground car park” and “Amphitheatre for concerts.” These choices communicate the main ideas, but some wording is informal or imprecise for an academic map summary: “pretty simple,” “well-designed,” “kids” and “picture of the map” are less suitable. There are also spelling errors in “eact,” “cummunity,” “restraunt” and “playarea,” while “greenhouse” does not match the map’s label, “glasshouse.” Aim for more precise location and change vocabulary, and check spelling carefully. More accurate terms would help you describe the features without relying on general evaluations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some more developed structures, such as “They have now converted the stage into an Amphitheatre for concerts in the park.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “both of the maps shows” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “first opened for public” needs an article or possessive form. The past-tense description also shifts inconsistently: “They had also builded” should use the correct past participle, while “It even has a pond” shifts to the present when describing the 1920 plan. There are also awkward sentence patterns, such as “New park layout also has.” Check agreement, articles and tense consistency, while retaining the mix of sentence forms you already attempt.

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