Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans compare a common park area for public when it first opened in 1920 and the same area now.

Overall, the plans demonstraste a significant amount of changes over the years. Such as, the fountain is completely removed from the centre and, a cafe is constructed.

To begin with, in 1920 the Grange park showed a very typical layout with a fountain in the centre, while facing the entrance from both north and south sides. There was a stage area specific for musicians surrounded with four seating areas. In addition, there was a pond for water plants in northest side and glasshouse in southeast side. The was overall three rose gardens in Arnold avenue.

Moving on, in today's period, rose garden is placed in centre, surrounded with seating areas all around it, instead of founatin. In addition, there is an ampitheatre for concerts, while the the entrance stays the same. Moreover, the children's play area is also construted whereas the water feature is moved to southeast with the addition of entrance for underground parking for cars.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation clearly: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, and the park gains a café and other modern facilities. You also compare several locations accurately, including the former pond and glasshouse areas with the present play area and water feature. However, some important details are omitted or unclear. For example, the café’s location and the north-west rose garden’s continued presence are not reported, and the amphitheatre is not explicitly linked to the western area. The statement that the stage was “surrounded with four seating areas” is not supported by the plan, and “three rose gardens in Arnold avenue” misplaces them. A more complete, precise overview and clearer location comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by separate descriptions of the 1920 plan and the present-day park. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Moving on” help signal this progression, and the reader can generally follow the comparison. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, however. “Such as” is not smoothly attached to the overview sentence, while “In addition” and “Moreover” are used repeatedly without always showing a meaningful relationship between details. The phrase “while facing the entrance from both north and south sides” also makes the relationship between the fountain and entrances difficult to understand. Grouping features by area and using clearer references would make the progression more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose gardens,” “glasshouse,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature,” which makes the main changes understandable. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “significant amount of changes.” However, several spelling errors—“demonstraste,” “founatin,” “ampitheatre,” and “construted”—reduce accuracy. Some word combinations are unnatural, including “common park area for public,” “stage area specific for musicians,” and “entrance for underground parking for cars.” “Moved” is also imprecise for a feature that has been newly located in a different part of the park. More accurate collocations and careful spelling would make the description more fluent and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” and most of the intended meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless affect clarity. In “the plans demonstraste a significant amount of changes,” the subject–verb form and the construction with “amount” are problematic; “the the entrance” contains a repeated article. The sentence beginning “Such as” is a fragment, and “The was overall three rose gardens” has an unclear sentence structure. There are also issues with articles and number, as in “rose garden is placed in centre,” and with punctuation around “and” in the overview. Check sentence completeness, article use, and agreement when editing.

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