Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans below illustrates a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, it is observed that the park had a significant improvement from what it use to look like before, entrance to the Grange park still maintains the same position, with an additonal entrance to the underground park. However, other facilities and buildings have been changed and also experienced a major upgrade.

As at 1920, the fountain which was located at the center of the building was totally replaced by a Rose garden and four seats placed at each sides of the garden, the fountain was then upgraded to a water feature which is now located at the bottom right corner which was formely occupied by a glasshouse. Subsequently, the area which formally occupies ponds for water plants at the top right corner was transformed to the area where children play. Furthermore, the rose garden which was beside the pond for water plants before, was re-established to a cafe.

The stage for musicians which was located by the left side of the fountain experienced a major upgrade to an Amphitheatre for concerts, has this will provide move seats and space for individuals. An extra entrance was also added to the right side of the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from a fountain to a central rose garden, and accurately compare several former and current features, including the pond becoming a children’s play area and the glasshouse site becoming a water feature. The overview also notes that the park’s entrances remain broadly in place and that an underground car-park entrance has been added. This covers the task well, with some detail beyond a basic summary. However, the account is selective: it omits the north-west rose garden that remains, and does not clearly describe the amphitheatre’s location in relation to the former south-west rose garden. The claim that the central garden has four seats “at each sides” is also imprecise; the plan shows seats surrounding it. A more complete overview and precise spatial comparisons would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. Its sequence from the central area to the eastern features and then the western area is generally understandable, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “Subsequently” help connect details. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “the fountain was then upgraded to a water feature” suggests a direct conversion, although the water feature is in the south-east, on the former glasshouse site. The long second body paragraph also combines several changes in one sentence, making the spatial relationships harder to follow. Grouping changes by area and using clearer references such as “in the north-east” would make progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “replaced,” “transformed,” “re-established,” and “major upgrade.” These choices help communicate that the park has been redesigned, and most of the intended meaning remains clear. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, however: “improvement” assumes the changes are better, “building” is used for the park, and “upgraded” does not accurately describe a feature being relocated or replaced. There are also spelling errors such as “additonal” and “formely,” and “move seats” appears to mean “more seats.” Aim for neutral map-description language and check spelling; precise verbs such as “replaced,” “relocated,” and “converted” will make comparisons more reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning “which” and “where,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “The plans below illustrates” should use a plural verb, while “it use to look like” needs the past form “used to.” The sentence beginning “The stage for musicians…” is not grammatically complete: “experienced a major upgrade to an Amphitheatre …, has this will provide…” combines clauses without a workable structure. There are also article and number issues in “at each sides.” Use shorter, complete sentences when describing each change, and check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency.

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