Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is park which is built in 1920 . This time it has a rose garden, pond for water plants, from the entrance of Arnold Avenue on left and right both side has rose garden, in the middle its has a fountain and if we entery from eldon street its left side rose garden or front of rose garden there is a stage for musician and the right side of grasshouse there is four seat for sitting people now we see today park there is a cafe ,children play area and also in middle its has a rose garden and also around there is seats there is underground car park on upper its has water feature in moden park its has also Amphitheater for concerts the mainly difference between we see new park is designed morden

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant features, including the fountain and rose gardens in the earlier plan, and the café, play area and concert amphitheatre in the present park. However, the response only minimally summarises the maps: it gives no clear overview of the main changes and omits important comparisons, such as the pond becoming a play area and the glasshouse being replaced by a water feature. Some locations are unclear or inaccurate, including “underground car park on upper,” and the description does not explain the park’s overall transformation. The response is also 14 words below the required minimum. To improve, write a concise overview first, then compare the main changes by area and state locations precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to move from the 1920 plan to the park today, and phrases such as “now we see today park” signal the change in time. However, nearly all the information is packed into one long, loosely connected sequence, so the reader has difficulty following the locations and comparisons. Linking words such as “and,” “also” and “if” are repeated or used without clear relationships, and references such as “its” and “there” are often unclear. Organise the response into paragraphs—for example, an overview followed by one paragraph on the original layout and one on the present layout—and use clear location-based comparisons to create progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “pond,” “fountain,” “cafe” and “Amphitheater for concerts,” so the reader can recognise several park features. The range is nevertheless limited and repetitive, with general wording such as “there is” and “has” doing much of the descriptive work. Some word choices or forms make details difficult to understand, for example “grasshouse,” “four seat for sitting people” and “on upper.” Spelling and form errors such as “entery,” “moden” and “morden” also reduce precision. Build a wider set of accurate map-description terms, including “located,” “replaced by,” “in the north-east corner” and “along the southern edge.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe several features in connected sentences, but sentence structures are mostly simple or run together, and frequent errors make relationships between details unclear. Examples include “It is park which is built in 1920,” “in the middle its has a fountain,” and “the mainly difference between we see new park.” Articles, verb forms, agreement and sentence boundaries need more control; for instance, the opening needs an article, and the present-tense descriptions should use consistent subject–verb patterns. Practise writing short, complete comparison sentences first, such as “The central fountain has been replaced by a rose garden.” Then combine ideas with accurate clauses and punctuation.

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