Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the given diagram demonstrate the public park when it begins in 1920 till todays era over the period of 126 years.

overall there are significant changes made to park that changes parks layout. since from the starting there was a fountain opposite to entrance furthermore now it is transform into rose garden. there are crucial factors that are made to park is stage for musicians is converted into Amphitheatre for concerts overall all the structure is converted to modern era facilities.

Many facilities are introduced for invididual for every age groups. the major upgradification is rose garden is now transformed into cafe furthermore water pond is now converted childrens play area stage for musician is transformed into amphitheatre for concerts

underground car park is now introduced for public convinence and a water feature is now made for public in south west. all the seats are now designed in a pattern that they surround the rose garden.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change in the park’s central area: the fountain is replaced by a rose garden, with seats arranged around it. You also report several important conversions, including the musicians’ stage becoming an amphitheatre and the pond becoming a children’s play area. This gives the reader a relevant account of the redevelopment. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the water feature is in the south-east, not the south-west, and the café replaces a rose garden rather than being a transformation of the rose garden itself. The overview that “all the structure is converted” is also too broad, since the north-west rose garden and the entrances remain. A more precise comparison of what stayed and what changed would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an overall shape, moving from an opening statement to a general overview and then to examples of new facilities. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points are repeated: the stage becoming an amphitheatre appears twice, as does the rose garden replacing the fountain. Linking words such as “furthermore” and “overall” are used, but sometimes do not show a clear relationship between the ideas. The final paragraph also combines several separate changes without a clear order. Organise the details by area—for example, north, centre and south—or group replacements together, and use each comparison once. Clearer paragraphing and more precise referencing would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing changes, including “converted,” “introduced,” “surround,” and “facilities,” and the reader can generally understand the park-related ideas. There are also attempts at less common wording, such as “crucial factors” and “upgradification,” but these are not natural or precise in this context. Several spelling and word-choice problems, including “invididual,” “convinence,” and “todays era,” reduce accuracy. Phrases such as “water pond” and “made for public” are also awkward. Aim for standard map-description language and accurate collocations, such as “the pond was replaced by a play area” and “a car-park entrance was added.” This would make your vocabulary more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “where” and clauses introduced by “since,” so there is some structural variety. However, errors in sentence construction and verb forms are evident in examples such as “the given diagram demonstrate” and “it is transform into rose garden.” Articles and plural forms are also often missing or inaccurate, as in “to park” and “every age groups.” Some sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the overview and the final paragraph, making relationships between ideas harder to interpret. Practise forming accurate comparison sentences, for example, “The fountain was replaced by a rose garden,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles and sentence boundaries. More reliable control of these basics would improve clarity.

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