Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The map below illustrates the transformation that Grange Park underwent since 1920.

Overall, the park now has more seating space than there was in 1920. Two entry gates one at Arnold Avenue and the other at Eldon street have remained the same till date. The park has expanded interactive facilities like children's play area, cafe and amphitheater for concerts.

In 1920, the park was more nature driven and consisted of 3 rose gardens, a pond for water plants and a mountain in the center. Seats were present in the borders of the park. A glasshouse was present to the right of the entrance located at Eldon Avenue, with a stage located centrally beside the fountain.

Today, the rose garden occupies the center of the park with seats facing the garden on all 4 sides. The entrance on the Eldon street has a water feature to its right side. The North East corner of the park has a children's play area located right beside the cafe. An expanded version of the stage for musicians is now converted into an amphitheater for concerts to the left with a rose garden to its right.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the park’s main transformation, noting the unchanged entrances and the addition of facilities such as a café, play area and amphitheatre. Several key comparisons are also accurate: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden with seating, and the north-east pond becomes a children’s play area. However, some details are misreported or imprecise. The 1920 map shows a fountain, not “a mountain,” and the stage was west of the fountain rather than centrally beside it. The glasshouse was beside Eldon Street, not Eldon Avenue. The claim that the park has more seating is not clearly supported, and the café is not beside the play area. More precise coverage of these changes would strengthen an otherwise relevant, well-focused summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is organised into an introduction, an overview and two chronological detail paragraphs, so the reader can follow the comparison between 1920 and today. Time markers such as “In 1920” and “Today” help establish progression, and the final paragraph groups several present-day features together. To make the organisation more effective, use clearer links between corresponding locations and changes—for example, explain directly that the pond became the play area and the glasshouse site now contains a water feature. Some references are also unclear: “to its right” and “to its right” in the final paragraph depend on the reader interpreting the map’s orientation. More consistent location-based sequencing and less reliance on directional pronouns would make cohesion smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing a map, including “transformation,” “occupies,” “borders” and “converted into.” These choices help communicate changes and locations, and the main meaning remains clear. However, some wording is imprecise or unnatural for this task. “Mountain” is an incorrect label for the fountain, while “more nature driven” and “expanded interactive facilities” are not natural descriptions of the map. “Entry gates” also suggests gates rather than the labelled entrances. Aim for precise map vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “more landscaped” or “new recreational facilities.” Check spelling and capitalisation of labels such as “Eldon Street” and “north-east” for a more consistent, polished response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the overview sentence beginning “Two entry gates…” and the relative clause “located right beside the cafe.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. For example, “Two entry gates one at Arnold Avenue and the other at Eldon street have remained” needs punctuation around the inserted location phrase, and “more seating space than there was in 1920” has an unclear comparison. In “A glasshouse was present to the right of the entrance located at Eldon Avenue,” the placement of “located” makes the relationship difficult to follow. Use clearer sentence boundaries and check articles, agreement and clause attachment to improve accuracy.

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