Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The maps shows the public Grange park which was firstly opened in 1920 and the similar park today.These maps shows the analysis by comparing the architecture and the progress of the park. The comparions shows that some things are similar as they were before when the park was firstly opened in 1920 and many new things are introduced now in the park. The things that are not changed still today are the entrance at the arnold avenue and alongside, eldon street. All other things are revolutionalized as there were fountain in the centre of the park , rode gardens at the corners of entrance, glasshouses, a pond of water and seats at the entrance of eldon street. There were also a stage for musicians, but now there is rose garden and a cafe at the entrance of the arnold avenue, a cafe at the rig side of that entrance , a children playgorund with cafe and a beautifully designed water area toward the eldon street entrance. There is also a Rode garden at the centre of the park with seating area and also designed a amphitheatre area for concerts.Today, there is also a entrance background car park outside the park near the eldon street. So , this comparsion shows how marveously the architecture of the garden in enhanced.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from the original park to its present-day layout and mention several relevant features, including the central rose garden, concert amphitheatre, café, play area and underground car-park entrance. You also note that the entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street remain. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the café is not beside the north entrance as stated, and the play area does not have a café. The description of the original rose gardens and seating is also imprecise. A clearer overview of the major changes, followed by accurate comparisons of the north, centre and south of the park, would make the response more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a general progression from the park’s history to its current features, and comparison language such as “but now” helps signal change. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, so the overview and the detailed comparisons are not clearly separated. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, particularly the section beginning “All other things are revolutionalized,” which makes it difficult to follow which features belong to each period. Repeated phrases such as “the park” and “there is” also make the flow mechanical. Use a short introduction and overview, then organise details by location or by the two time periods, with clear links between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to maps, including “entrance,” “fountain,” “amphitheatre” and “architecture.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “the analysis,” “revolutionalized,” “entrance background car park” and “beautifully designed water area.” Spelling errors, including “comparions,” “playgorund” and “marveously,” also reduce precision. Some repetition of “things” and “park” limits the range. Aim for straightforward, accurate map vocabulary—such as “features,” “was replaced by,” “located in” and “car-park entrance”—rather than using elaborate wording that does not clearly describe the layout.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the reader can generally understand the comparison. However, errors in agreement, articles, tense and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “The maps shows” should be “The maps show,” while “there were fountain” needs an article and plural agreement. The opening also runs “today.These maps” together without appropriate spacing or punctuation. Some sentences combine several features with commas and “and,” making their grammatical relationships unclear. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past tense for the 1920 layout and present tense for the current plan. More reliable control of these forms would make your comparisons easier to read.

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