Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The map shows the layouts of the Grange park when its first available for public in 1920 and its current layout.

Overall,a significant development has been made in the park.There is development of many new places such as, garden, theater and cafe. However, entrance of the park is sam in both layouts whereas, an underground carpark has been constructed.

A substancial number of development has been made.The rose garden is only retained, that is present in the left side of north entrance. All of the other two gardens are developed into one, between the two entrances where previously fountain was present.

The seating is made adjacent to four sides of the garden. Ponds for water plants is developed into children's play area and a cafe is built beside it.The stage of meuseum is constructed into amphitheater and a seating is added parallel to it.Instead of glasshouse,water feature is constructed in that place. In addition,an underground car park is constructed which entrnace is present right besides water feature. While entrances that are present right in the middle of north and south wall remained same

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from a formal garden with a central fountain to a park with new recreational facilities, and your overview notes that the north and south entrances remain while an underground car park is added. Several comparisons are accurate: the north-west rose garden remains, the pond becomes a play area, and the glasshouse site becomes a water feature. This covers the key changes, with some detail less fully reported. For example, the café replaces the northern rose garden east of the entrance, not the pond; the amphitheatre occupies the western area, and the central rose garden replaces the fountain rather than combining the other two gardens. Clarifying these locations and describing the retained features more precisely would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable overview followed by details, and it generally moves from the gardens and central area to the other facilities. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “While” help signal relationships. However, progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph begins with a repeated general claim, and several changes are crowded into one sequence, making it harder to follow which 1920 feature each current feature replaces. Some links are also awkward or incomplete, particularly the final “While” clause. Organise the details into clearer groups—for example, central and western changes, then northern and southern changes—and use explicit references such as “in the north-east” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “retained,” “adjacent,” “amphitheater,” and “underground car park.” This gives you a workable range, but inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations are noticeable and sometimes make the description less clear. Examples include “substancial,” “meuseum,” and “entrnace,” as well as “first available for public” and “a substantial number of development.” Some terms are also imprecise: “developed into” is repeated where “replaced by” would better describe the map changes. Aim for accurate, natural phrases and check spelling, especially for key facility names, so the reader can focus on the comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including a contrast with “whereas” and a clause beginning “While.” However, errors occur across sentence patterns and often make relationships difficult to interpret. For example, “when its first available for public” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase, while “Ponds for water plants is developed” has a subject–verb agreement problem and an unclear tense. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “a seating is added” and “Overall,a significant development.” The final sentence fragment beginning “While” does not form a complete sentence. Practise accurate past-to-present comparisons and check agreement, articles, and punctuation in each sentence.

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