Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams compare the infrastructure of a family park called Grange park, which was first inagurated in 1920, with its current blueprint to date.

Overall, Grange park saw some extraordinary changes, from it being a more commerical area with a glasshouse and pond to a more family oriented space including a children's play area and a water activities corner.

Since 1920s, the most dramatic change illustrated is the reconstruction of the center fountain and turning it into a beautiful rose garden with seats covering it from all four sides. Furthermore, the stage for musicians have now been renovated into a amphitheatre for concerts to accomodate larger audience.

The glasshouse, located in the bottom left side of the infrastructure, has been reconstructed into a water activities corner and the pond for water plants is converted into a children's play area, making the space more family friendly. Furthermore, one more noticeable change is the addition of a cafe in the space, which was built in replacement of the Rose garden.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You provide a clear overview of the park’s shift towards family-oriented facilities and identify several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the western stage area becoming an amphitheatre, and the pond site becoming a play area. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the glasshouse was on the south-east edge, not the “bottom left,” and the response calls its replacement a “water activities corner” rather than the water feature. The café replaced a rose garden, but its position could be stated more precisely as north of the park, east of the entrance. The overview also describes the former park as “more commercial,” which is not clearly supported by the plan. More precise location comparisons and mention of retained features would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a broad overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. The main comparisons are generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Furthermore,” and “Since 1920s” help signal relationships. This organisation is effective, though the repeated use of “Furthermore” makes the connections somewhat mechanical. Some references are also imprecise: “the space” and “the infrastructure” do not always make clear which part of the park is meant, while “bottom left side” conflicts with the actual south-east location. Grouping changes by area or by what was replaced, and using clearer location references, would strengthen progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing change, including “reconstruction,” “converted,” “addition,” and “family oriented.” These choices help communicate the main transformations, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some expressions are inaccurate or unnatural for a map description: “infrastructure” is not the best term for the park layout, “water activities corner” does not match the labelled water feature, and “commercial area” is an unsupported interpretation. There are also spelling errors in “inagurated” and “accomodate,” and inconsistent capitalisation of “Grange park.” Choose precise facility names from the plan and use standard collocations such as “was replaced by” or “was converted into” to improve accuracy and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview sentence with “from … to …” and clauses describing what facilities replaced others. Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. For example, “the stage for musicians have now been renovated” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “into a amphitheatre” needs the article “an.” The opening phrase “Since 1920s” also needs an article (“Since the 1920s”), while “with a glasshouse and pond” would be clearer with parallel articles. The sentence beginning “The glasshouse, located…” is long and combines several changes, so separating the information would help maintain grammatical control while retaining complex structures.

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