Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A comparison between Grange park in 1920 and today. There are some Similarities and some diffrences in both the layouts.

First of all putting light on the similarities. One of Rose gardens is still on the same spot as it was in 1920. The entrances hasn't been changed over that period of time. other then that many things changed with time.

Coming to the diffrences there are a lot of changing which have been made during time. Two of the three rose gardens were replaced one with cafe and the othe one is just removed. Satge of musicians was replaced with amphitheatre of concerts. In the older version of park had seating near the boundry walls however in the new layout seats are place in the centre. There is also an addition of water feature and children's play area in the park. Cafe is also included.

In my opinion things improve as the time passes. Moreover building layouts and plans also changed with the necessity. As in 1920s there were very few cars so there were no need for a car park that time but now cars are very common so they also build an underground car park as well. Stage of musicians was good for that time but now is the time for big concerts so they change accordingly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes, including the north-west rose garden remaining, the musicians’ stage becoming an amphitheatre, and new play and water features. These details are generally grounded in the plans, and you also note that the entrances remain. However, some comparisons are incomplete or inaccurate: the central fountain was replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats, not simply by seating, and the south-west rose garden was replaced by the amphitheatre rather than “just removed.” The glasshouse’s replacement by the water feature is also omitted. The final paragraph gives speculative explanations about cars and concerts instead of summarising visible changes. A clearer overview of the park’s main transformation, followed by more precise comparisons, would make the response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on similarities, a paragraph on differences, and a concluding paragraph. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Phrases such as “First of all” and “Coming to the differences” signal the shift between sections, although these transitions feel somewhat mechanical, and the conclusion moves away from map description into personal speculation. Some references are also unclear: “the other one” does not specify which rose garden is meant, while “there” in the car-park explanation is imprecise. Grouping changes by area or by features that remained versus those replaced, and using clearer references, would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “entrances,” “rose gardens,” “amphitheatre,” “seating,” and “underground car park,” so the main ideas are usually understandable. There are also attempts at more descriptive phrasing, such as “replaced with” and “near the boundary walls.” However, spelling errors (“diffrences,” “Satge,” “othe”) and awkward or imprecise expressions reduce control. “A lot of changing” and “putting light on” are not natural in this context, while “seats are place in the centre” does not accurately describe the central rose garden surrounded by seats. Aim for precise map language and check spelling and collocations; this will make your descriptions clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional explanation beginning “As in 1920s there were very few cars,” which shows some range. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and several errors affect clarity. For example, “The entrances hasn’t been changed” has subject–verb disagreement, and “In the older version of park had seating” is an incomplete construction. The sentence beginning “Two of the three rose gardens were replaced” also becomes unclear because the following phrase lacks a well-formed structure. Articles and tense forms are sometimes missing or inconsistent, as in “in 1920s” and “things improve as the time passes.” Practise complete sentence patterns, agreement, and article use, then proofread each sentence for accuracy.

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