Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given map charts demontrate the details about the variation of public park during the span of 126 years. Looking from an overall perspective, it can be witnessed that the area of grange park has undergone noticing changes. Many rearrangement took place along with certain expansion. Also a lot of new places were introduced.

After analysing the chart, it can be clearly seen that the area of fountain at the centre was converted into rose garden and all around create for seating. Furthermore, rose garden in the south west side was removed. The glasshouse was replaced to water feature.

Focusing an to remaining changes, the major change could be noticing was the stage for musicians taken down to amphitheatre for cocerts. Moreover, the area of rose garden was changed to cafe and in the north east side of map, pond for water plants replaced to children play area. Finally, the entrance and rose garden were left untouched.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a relevant overview, noting that the park underwent substantial changes, and identify several accurate conversions: the central fountain became a rose garden with seating around it, the glasshouse became a water feature, and the pond was replaced by a children’s play area. This covers the main transformation and shows some of the detail expected in a strong response. However, some features are less fully reported: the amphitheatre occupies the western area, and the north-west rose garden remains unchanged, while the café replaces the northern rose garden. The statement that “the entrance and rose garden were left untouched” is too broad, since only the central entrances and north-west rose garden remain in place; other gardens changed. More precise comparisons and a clearer distinction between retained and altered features would strengthen the overview and detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introductory overview followed by paragraphs describing changes, and the reader can generally follow the sequence of comparisons. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help signal additions. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, with several changes listed rather than grouped by location or by what was retained versus replaced. Some references are unclear, particularly “the area of rose garden” and “the entrance and rose garden,” which do not specify exactly which features are meant. The opening overview also repeats the general idea of change without identifying the most important pattern. Organising the details into clearer north, centre, and south comparisons, and using more precise referencing, would make the account flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing maps, including “converted,” “replaced,” “removed,” and “untouched,” and these choices help communicate the main changes. There is also an attempt to use a range of expressions, such as “overall perspective” and “major change.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “variation of public park,” “noticing changes,” and “all around create for seating.” Spelling errors such as “demontrate” and “cocerts” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main comparisons, but they make the description less precise and natural. Focus on standard map language and check spelling and word forms when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “After analysing” and “Focusing on,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, especially in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “Many rearrangement took place” needs plural agreement, while “the stage for musicians taken down to amphitheatre” is missing a finite verb and an article. The phrase “all around create for seating” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “Focusing an to remaining changes” is not correctly formed. These errors sometimes make individual statements difficult to interpret. Practise complete clauses with accurate subjects and verbs, and check articles, agreement, and prepositions in each sentence.

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