Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plan illustrates the Grange park when it was opened in 1920 and its current layout.

Overall, it can be seen clearly that in early stage park was implanted with multiple rose gardens, and sitting arrangement at different corners, while in present layout all seats for visitors which was scattered in the park has now alligned around the rose garden in the center of park.

In addition, ammusement facities like satge for musicians has now replaced by Amphitheatre of concerts with round shape sitting for customers. Ponds for water plants which was located at the upper right corner of the park has been displaced by children's play area, whereas glasshouse is now replaced by water feature to inhance the beauty of the park. Recent developements also includes the addition of underground car parking for visitors at right lower siude of enterance, while enterance gates at both sides of the park reamains unchange.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response gives a clear overview of the main transformation: scattered seating has been reorganised around the central rose garden, and several former features have been replaced. It also accurately compares the musicians’ stage with the amphitheatre, the pond with the children’s play area, and the glasshouse with the water feature. These relevant comparisons show good coverage of the plans. However, some important changes are omitted, including the café replacing a northern rose garden and the amphitheatre also occupying the area of the south-west rose garden. The statement that the park was “implanted with multiple rose gardens” is broad and does not distinguish which gardens remained or changed. More precise coverage of these features would make the account more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression: it introduces the plans, gives an overall comparison, and then describes several specific replacements. Linking words such as “while,” “whereas,” and “in addition” help connect the changes, and the reader can follow the general account. However, the final paragraph combines several separate developments in one long sentence, making the relationships between them less clear. The phrase “Recent developments also includes” introduces another point, but the sentence then moves quickly from the car-park entrance to the unchanged gates. Clearer paragraphing and shorter sentences grouped by area—for example, northern features, central and western changes, then southern features—would improve the flow. Some linking is effective, but the progression is not consistently controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant map vocabulary, including “rose gardens,” “upper right corner,” “replaced,” and “underground car parking,” so the main changes are generally understandable. It also attempts more formal language such as “displaced” and “addition.” However, noticeable spelling errors—“ammusement,” “facities,” “satge,” “inhance,” and “enterance”—reduce accuracy. Several word choices or collocations are awkward: “sitting arrangement” is better expressed as “seating,” “implanted with” does not naturally describe a park’s features, and “Amphitheatre of concerts” should be “amphitheatre for concerts.” “Customers” is also less suitable than “visitors” in this context. A more accurate set of common planning terms, with careful spelling and natural collocations, would make the description clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is an attempt to use a mix of simple and complex sentences, particularly through clauses with “while” and “whereas.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “stage for musicians has now replaced” needs a passive form (“has now been replaced”), while “Ponds … which was located” has a plural subject followed by a singular verb. “In early stage park” is missing articles, and “all seats … which was scattered … has now alligned” contains several agreement and clause-structure problems. The final sentence also has an unclear construction around the entrances and the car park. Practise accurate passive forms and subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences into shorter, controlled clauses.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.