Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided maps illustrate the Grange Park in

1920 and the same park today and what changes it undergone over this period.

Overall, the park undergone major changes. Entrances of the park and rose garden in north west witnessed no change. The fountain is replaced by a new rose garden and seats are built around it. The pond is replaced by a children's play area and stage for musicians is transformed into amphitheater. A new underground car park is introduced.

Looking into more detail, in 1920, the Grange park had two entrances, one in Arnold avenue and other in Eldon street and both remain unchanged in the new map while a new entrance is introduced in the east side with an underground car park. The fountain which was located in the center previously is replaced by a rose garden and seats are built around it, while seats from other areas of the park are removed. new facilities of a cafe and playground are added in the place of rose garden and pond for water plants. Another significant change is replacement of a glasshouse with a water feature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You give a relevant overview of the main changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond becoming a play area, and the addition of an underground car-park entrance. You also compare the park’s earlier and current layouts in the detail paragraph. However, some features are reported less fully: the amphitheatre occupies the western area that included both the former stage and south-west rose garden, and the café replaces the northern rose garden east of the entrance. The statement that seats in other areas “are removed” is too broad, since seats remain around the central garden and elsewhere. More precise coverage of these changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an overview is followed by a paragraph describing specific changes, and the sequence from entrances to central features and then other facilities is generally easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “while,” and “Another significant change” help connect comparisons. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical, however, with repeated use of “replaced” and “change,” and the long final detail sentence combines several separate developments. Some references are also imprecise: “new facilities” groups the café and playground without clearly locating each one. Use shorter, more clearly grouped comparisons—for example, northern, central, and southern changes—to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of map vocabulary, including “entrances,” “fountain,” “rose garden,” “underground car park,” and “water feature,” and terms such as “transformed” and “introduced” show some flexibility. The meaning is generally clear, but several choices are imprecise or awkward: “witnessed no change” is unnatural for a park feature, and “new facilities of a cafe and playground” is not a natural collocation. “Amphitheater” is understandable, though the task label is “amphitheatre.” To move beyond adequate range, choose more precise location and change vocabulary, such as “remains unchanged,” “is converted into,” and “occupies the north-east corner,” while checking spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and relative clauses such as “which was located in the center.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the park undergone” needs an auxiliary (“has undergone”), and “the same park today and what changes it undergone” is not a well-formed clause. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention: “a cafe” should be “a café,” and “new facilities” begins a sentence without a capital letter. The sentence beginning “The fountain…” is a fragment in the overview. Review auxiliary verbs, complete sentence structure, and punctuation; greater accuracy in these areas would make your varied sentence forms more effective.

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