Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given graph shows the changes of a public park called Grange park when it was built and today.

In general, it can be clearly seen that there were maximum changes on the east side, while entrance is on the same place.

Looking at the graph in more detail, in 1920, there were three rose gardens even though one rose garden has been removed after changes. There was a fountain which has been replaced by rose garden and seats have also been provided in its all sides. Pond is replaced by children's play area and glass house is replaced by water feature. The seats on the east side has been vanished.

Moving to the next, cafe has been built on the place of rose garden. Stage for musician has been replaced by amphitheatre for concerts. A new entrance underground car park has been constructed on the south-east side of the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation clearly: the central fountain becomes a rose garden with seating, the pond becomes a play area, and the glasshouse is replaced by a water feature. You also note the new café, concert amphitheatre and underground car-park entrance, so the response covers the key changes and gives an overall comparison. The overview that the east side changed most is relevant, although the claim that the entrance stayed in the same place is imprecise: the park’s north and south entrances remain, while a separate car-park entrance is added at the south-east. Some details are underdeveloped, particularly the north-west rose garden, which remains, and the amphitheatre’s location. More precise coverage of these features would make the summary more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, a general overview, and two paragraphs describing changes. The sequence from the 1920 layout to the present is easy to follow, and phrases such as “Looking at the graph in more detail” and “Moving to the next” signal progression. However, the latter phrase is awkward and does not clearly identify what the next paragraph covers. The first detail paragraph also moves between several locations without a consistent spatial order, while “The seats on the east side has been vanished” feels disconnected from the surrounding comparisons. Use a clearer organising principle, such as describing the park from north to south or grouping central and edge changes, and use more precise linking and referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “replaced,” “provided,” “constructed,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These choices communicate most of the map information, and you attempt some less common terms. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural: “maximum changes” is not a natural way to describe the greatest extent of change, “has been vanished” is an unsuitable collocation, and “graph” does not accurately name a pair of plans. There is also inconsistency in “cafe” and “glass house,” where the map labels are “Café” and “Glasshouse.” Aim for precise map vocabulary and natural collocations, and avoid repeating general phrases such as “has been replaced” when alternatives like “was converted into” or “gave way to” fit.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “there were three rose gardens even though one rose garden has been removed after changes.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions reduce accuracy. For example, “The seats on the east side has” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “has been vanished” uses an incorrect passive form. Tense control is also inconsistent when describing the past and present: “has been removed after changes” would be clearer as a past-tense comparison, while present-day features can be described in the present. The opening phrase “when it was built and today” is also structurally unclear. Use past simple for the 1920 plan and present simple for today, checking agreement and passive forms.

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