Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The layout of the Grange Park has come to change quite a lot with many starking differences from what it first was in 1920, to what it is today. To attract the public of today what once used to be stage for musicians has now been turned into an Amphitheatre. The attraction of the rose garden is a feature that remains the sa,me today too, the placement of which however has changed quite a bit. Instead of being in three separate places in the park, the rose garden is now in situated in the centre of the park with seats placed on all four sides, becoming a centre attraction, which in 1920 used to be a fountain. One of the rose garden is still intact in its original place, that is the left side of the garden. The garden on the right side has, however, been replaced with a cafe, next ti which is a children's play area, where previously was a pond for water plants. Adjacent to that is now the water feature of the park which was once the greenhouse.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the musicians’ stage by an amphitheatre, the central fountain by a rose garden with seating, and the pond and glasshouse by new facilities. You also note that the north-west rose garden remains. This gives the response a relevant overview of the park’s transformation. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the central rose garden is described as being where the rose gardens used to be, although it replaces the fountain, and “the garden on the right side” is imprecise. The entrances and the underground car-park access are omitted. The main features are covered, but not all are reported with the clarity and precision needed for a fuller account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows a broadly sensible sequence, moving from the amphitheatre and central area to the northern and south-eastern changes. Linking phrases such as “Instead of,” “however,” and “Adjacent to that” help show contrast and location. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear overview separated from the detailed comparisons. Some references are difficult to follow: “the garden on the right side” and “next to which” do not identify locations precisely, while “that” in the final sentence could refer to more than one feature. The opening is also wordy before the main comparisons begin. Grouping the overview and then describing the western, central, and eastern areas would create clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for describing change and location, including “turned into,” “replaced,” “placement,” and “Adjacent to.” These choices communicate the main transformations, and some less common wording, such as “centre attraction,” shows an attempt to vary expression. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “starking differences,” “the attraction of the rose garden,” and “the garden on the right side” are not precise descriptions for a map report. There are also spelling or typing errors, including “sa,me” and “ti,” and “greenhouse” does not match the map’s label, “glasshouse.” More consistent use of precise terms such as “north-east corner” and “southern edge” would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a complex contrast beginning “Instead of being in three separate places…” and clauses linked with “which” and “where.” The main changes are generally understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. For example, “has come to change” is an unnatural tense construction; “used to be stage” needs an article; and “is now in situated” contains an unnecessary preposition. Agreement is also inconsistent in “One of the rose garden is,” and the long sentence beginning “The garden on the right side” is difficult to control, particularly around “next to which.” Aim for shorter, accurately structured comparisons, and check articles, agreement, and clause boundaries while retaining some complex sentences.

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