Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram compare the changings made in a public park named Grange Park, when it's frst opened in 1920 with the same park today.

Overall, when Grange Park was first opened in 1920, seats and rose garden covered most of the side space of park. Two main entrances, Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street stays the same over this period.

In 1920, main attractions includes a fountain in the middle, a stage for musicians right next to fountain. While, entering form the Arlond Avenue, both sides had seats and rose garden, followed by pond for water plants on the left side. The entrance from Arlond Street also had seats and rose garden on left, but glasshouse on the right side.

With the new deveplopments, as of toady many new attractions has been added or replaced. For instance, fountain has been replaced seats surrounding the rose garden in middle, and an amphitheatre right on it's east side. From Aldon Street entrance, there's a water feature and alongside, there is a entrance for underground car park. Entering from Arlond Avenue, rose garden stays on the right side, on the left side a cafe is located follwed by children's play area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both time periods and identify several important changes, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden with surrounding seats, the addition of an amphitheatre, and the new underground car-park entrance. The overview also notes that the park’s two street entrances remain. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the amphitheatre is west of the central garden, not east, and the café and children’s play area are both on the northern side, with the café east of the entrance and the play area in the north-east corner. The description of the 1920 layout also gives limited attention to the north-east pond and the glasshouse’s precise position. A more precise overview and clearer location comparisons would make the main features more fully reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about the original plan, and a paragraph about the present-day park. This gives the reader a sensible route through the comparison, and phrases such as “In 1920” and “With the new developments” help signal the time shift. However, some connections are awkward or unclear. For example, “While, entering from the Arlond Avenue” is not smoothly attached to the preceding sentence, and “From Aldon Street entrance” does not clearly establish which features are being described in relation to that entrance. Organise each body paragraph by area or by matching old and new features, and use clearer references such as “in the north-east corner” to strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “fountain,” “stage for musicians,” “rose garden,” “water feature,” and “underground car park.” These terms make the subject clear, and “replaced” is useful for describing change. However, several word choices and collocations are imprecise, such as “side space of park,” “right next to fountain,” and “new attractions has been added or replaced.” Spelling errors, including “frst,” “deveplopments,” and “toady,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise location language and check spelling carefully; terms such as “western area,” “adjacent to,” and “northern edge” would help describe the map more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a time contrast in “when it’s first opened in 1920 with the same park today” and a conditional-style location description beginning “Entering from…”. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. Examples include “The diagram compare,” “main attractions includes,” and “many new attractions has been added”; these require subject–verb agreement. The opening also needs a consistent tense, such as “when it first opened,” and “seats surrounding the rose garden” needs a clearer grammatical structure. Practise accurate past and present forms and build complex sentences around a clear subject and verb.

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