Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given picture illustrates map of public park when it first open in 1920 and the same park today with new innovations.

For instance, the given diagram shows the structure of grange park in 1920 that was located in arnold avenue. Moreover, there was three rose gardens in different locations in the ground and seats was also available. Furthermore, there was a fountain on the enterance of eldon street and a pond for water plants on the enterance of arnold avenue. There was a glass house and the stage for musicians in old map.

On the other hand, in modern structure, there is cafe on the enterance of arnold avenue and a children's play area. A rose garden covered with seats located in the center of park. There is amphiyheatre for concerts on the left side of park. For the addition, a wter feature on the enterance of underground car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features in both plans, including the rose gardens, seating, café, play area and amphitheatre. However, the account only partially covers the main changes and contains important location errors: the fountain was in the centre, not at the Eldon Street entrance, and the pond was in the north-east corner, not at the Arnold Avenue entrance. The overview is also unclear; “new innovations” does not summarise the park’s main transformation. Some key comparisons are missing, such as the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats, and the glasshouse giving way to a water feature. Organise the report around the overall changes, then describe locations accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression: it first describes the 1920 plan and then contrasts it with the present-day park. Paragraphing and signposting with “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other hand” help readers follow this basic structure. However, the sequence within each paragraph is more like a list than a clearly organised comparison, and some links are mechanical or imprecise. For example, “For the addition” does not naturally introduce the water feature, while “For instance” does not clearly signal the start of the historical description. Group features by area or by what changed, and use references such as “this area” only when the location is clear. This would make the progression more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of task-related terms, including “rose gardens,” “pond for water plants,” “stage for musicians,” and “amphitheatre for concerts,” so the reader can identify many park features. However, several word choices and spelling errors reduce precision: “new innovations” is vague, “enterance” is misspelled, and “wter feature” is difficult to interpret. “Located in Arnold Avenue” also suggests the park itself was on the road rather than bordered by it. Choose precise map language such as “bordered by,” “in the north-east corner,” and “replaced by.” Check spelling of key labels and avoid using “structure” for the park’s layout. These changes would make the description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the contrast between the two plans is understandable. However, the range is limited, and errors in articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence construction occur regularly. Examples include “illustrates map” (missing an article), “when it first open” (incorrect verb form), “there was three rose gardens” (agreement), and “a rose garden … located” (missing a finite verb). The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical connection between the park’s opening and its present-day state. Practise accurate patterns such as “The map shows the park as it was when it first opened” and “There were three rose gardens.” More reliable sentence structures will improve clarity.

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