Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans illustrates a public park in 1920 when it first opened and the same park now.

Overall, comparison of grange park between at the time of opening and today are demonstrated in the picture contains Arnold anenue, Eldon street, rose gardens seats and fountain with their changes trends. Rose garden and seats are replaced and fountain, pond for water plants and stage for musicians are disapperaed.

To begin with, Grange park in 1920 there were some rose gardens around the both sides of Arnold avenue entrance with some seats. Moreover, There was a glasshouse to right corner of the Eldon street entrance and next to this entrance there was a water fountain. In the North West corner there was pond for water plants and between the rose gardens there was stage for musicians.

In Contrast, Grange park of today is update with some changes. Fountain is replace with rose garden with seats around the garden while, Arnold avenue entrance left garden remains same and right side of this entrance a cafe is replace with rose garden along with pond for water plants is remove now and create children's play area. Furthermore, Stage for Musicians is converted into Amphitheatre for concerts and the right side of the Eldon street entrance water feature is installed also a new entrance underground car park is available.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the two time periods and report several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond site becoming a play area, and the western stage area becoming an amphitheatre. This gives the response a relevant overview and covers much of the plan. Some details, however, are unclear or inaccurate: in 1920 the pond was in the north-east corner, not the north-west, and the café occupies the site of a rose garden rather than replacing one with another rose garden. The overview also says rose gardens and seats are replaced, although the north-west rose garden remains and seats still surround the central garden. To strengthen the response, distinguish more precisely between features that remain, are relocated, or are replaced, and include the underground car-park entrance in the overview of major changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the earlier and current layouts. This makes the comparison generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “To begin with” and “In Contrast” signal the shift between periods. However, some links are mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between features. For example, “Moreover” introduces a detail without a clear connection, while the long final sentence joins several changes with “while” and “also,” making the locations harder to track. The overview is also difficult to interpret because several features are grouped together without clear relationships. Use shorter, location-based comparisons and refer consistently to north, south, east, and west to improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “rose gardens,” “pond for water plants,” “stage for musicians,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These terms show awareness of the task’s subject, but the range and control are uneven. Several word-choice or spelling errors reduce precision, such as “disapperaed,” “update,” and “right corner”; “right” is especially ambiguous when describing a map. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “changes trends” and “is available” for a newly added entrance. Aim for accurate map vocabulary and natural collocations, and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “north-east corner,” “was converted into,” and “was added” would make the comparisons clearer without requiring unnecessarily complex wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons using “while” and clauses describing what features became. However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to understand. The opening “The plans illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Grange park in 1920 there were” lacks a grammatical structure linking the place and the features. Verb forms are also unreliable: “Fountain is replace” should use a passive form such as “The fountain was replaced,” and “rose garden remains same” needs an article and a more complete construction. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly in the long final sentence. Practise accurate past and present passive forms, articles, and complete clauses before adding more complex linking.

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