Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map illustrates the changes that took place in the Grange Park between the past and the present.

Overall, there were undergone significantly changes in its layout and facilities. Several new areas were replaced and converted. The new areas such as water feature, children's play area

and cafe were introduced.

At the past, entrance had located on the northern and western side of the park. Moreover, stage for musicians were situated on the eastern side of the park. Pond for water plants were situated in the northwest corner of the park. Fountain was located in the centre of the park. The glasshouse was located in southwest corner of the park. The rose garden was situated on northern southern side of the park. Similarly, the seats were located on the eastern and western side of the park.

At present, rose garden has been replaced by cafe. Meanwhile, pond for water plants have been converted into children's play area. Glasshouse has been replaced by water feature. In the centre, the fountain has been replaced by rose garden with four seats. In addition, amphitheatre for concerts have been add on the eastern side of the park. Finally, the entrance underground car park has been add in the southwest corner of the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a clear overview of substantial change and identify several key conversions, including the pond becoming a play area and the glasshouse becoming a water feature. This meets the task well, and the response also compares the park across the two periods. However, some details are inaccurate: the entrances are on the north and south, not the north and west; the pond was in the north-east, not north-west; and the amphitheatre is in the western area, not the eastern side. The underground car-park entrance is at the south-east, not the south-west. The description of the rose gardens and seating is also unclear. More precise location reporting and a fuller account of the main changes would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about the original park and one about its present layout. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Meanwhile,” and “Finally” help signal additions and changes. However, some connections are mechanical, and the sequence within the past-layout paragraph is difficult to follow because locations are not grouped consistently. The phrase “northern southern side” is especially unclear, while “At the past” and “At present” do not create a smooth comparison. Organise details by area or pair each former feature with its replacement, and use clearer referencing to make the progression more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of map vocabulary, including “located,” “situated,” “replaced,” and “converted,” and the named facilities make the account relevant to the task. Some attempts at more specific language are useful, but several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “there were undergone significantly changes” is not a natural expression, and “new areas were replaced and converted” does not clearly describe the changes. Repeating “located” and “situated” also limits variety. Choose precise verbs for map changes, such as “remained,” “was relocated,” or “was replaced by,” and use accurate directional terms. This would make the descriptions clearer without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including an overview and several passive constructions, which are appropriate for describing changes over time. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to limit accuracy. Examples include “there were undergone,” “entrance had located,” “stage … were situated,” and “have been add.” These should be formed as, for example, “the layout changed significantly,” “the entrance was located,” and “the amphitheatre was added.” Articles are also often missing before singular countable nouns, as in “Fountain was located.” Practise accurate past and present passive forms and check subject–verb agreement; clearer control of these basics would make your meaning more consistently easy to follow.

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