Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The maps illustrate the changes that has been made in grange park at Arnold Avenue from 1920 to present.

Overall, It is clear from the maps that the park changes dramitically from a traditional park to a modernalized one by organizing the seats and adding new features such as, water feature, cafe and amphitheatre for concerts.

In 1920, fountain used to be in the centre of the park which is replaced by rose garden surrounded by re-ordering four seating areas. In the west, the stage for musicians is now moderates to a theatre for concerts. In the southern east new water feature is introduced where the glasshouse was in 1920.

However, the entrence points remain same one in the south and one in the north. Though rose garden two rose garden has been removed, only one remain in the northern west. The top right corner where there was a pond for water plants, now dedicate to children as playing zone. A cafe service is there beside by children playing area,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a relevant overview by describing a shift from a traditional park to one with newer facilities, and you identify several important changes accurately: the central fountain becomes a rose garden, the western stage area becomes an amphitheatre, and the former pond and glasshouse sites become a play area and water feature. This covers the main transformation, while the entrances are also correctly noted as unchanged. To make the account more complete, include other prominent details, especially the café replacing the northern rose garden and the underground car-park entrance. Some descriptions are imprecise: the amphitheatre occupies the western area, not simply the former stage site, and the central garden is surrounded by seats rather than created by “re-ordering four seating areas.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overall summary and paragraphs describing changes. This helps the reader follow the comparison. However, progression within the final paragraph is less controlled: “However” introduces information that is not really a contrast, and the sequence moves from entrances to rose gardens, the play area and café without a clear organising principle. The phrase “Though rose garden two rose garden has been removed” also makes the relationship between the remaining and removed gardens difficult to follow. Grouping changes by location or by features that remained versus those that changed, and using clearer links such as “In the north” and “By contrast,” would make the organisation more coherent and reduce abrupt transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “glasshouse,” “water feature” and “amphitheatre,” which allows the main changes to be identified. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “traditional park” and “modernalized,” but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and weaken precision. For example, “the stage … is now moderates to a theatre” does not express the change clearly, while “cafe service” is not the natural term for the facility shown. Spelling errors such as “dramitically” and “entrence” are noticeable. Aim for accurate map vocabulary and natural collocations, for example “has been converted into” and “a café has been added.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more complex structures, including “Overall, it is clear from the maps that…” and a contrast introduced by “Though.” However, errors in verb forms, agreement and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some relationships unclear. For example, “the changes that has been made” has incorrect agreement, and “fountain used to be … which is replaced” shifts awkwardly between past and present forms. The final sentence, “A cafe service is there beside by children playing area,” is also structurally difficult to interpret. Practise consistent past and present passive forms for map comparisons, such as “was replaced by” and “is now located,” and check articles and sentence boundaries.

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