Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given map chart illustrates the information regarding the changes in a public park from 1920 to today.

Overall, it can be seen that many changs take place in the present time. The principle change in the removal of fountain and addition of more seats.

To start with, in 1920, the park had two entrance one in the north arnold avenue and second in the sound called eldon street. Futher, in the center of the park a had a big fountain, and in the lioft of fountain had a stage for musicians. On the north , in life side of side of entrance had some seats, rose garden also some more seats and some like this on north side. In right side of park, had qa ros egarden with a pond which is for water plants and in north has a glass house.

Radical cxhanges can be seen in the present map after a long period. Firstly, the fountain is converted into rose garden with some seats around it. Park entrance from both side remained at the same place, whereas, stage for musicians replaced into amphitheatre fo concerts and pond change into a children's play area with a small cafe near it. Reduce in seats allover the park and added water feature in south east corner with a unground entrance of car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the two time periods and report several important changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the western stage area becoming an amphitheatre, and the pond being replaced by a children’s play area. You also note that the entrances remain in place and mention the new water feature and underground car-park entrance. However, the overview is unclear: “the principle change in the removal of fountain and addition of more seats” does not accurately summarise the main pattern, since seating is reduced overall and the central rose garden is surrounded by seats. Some locations are also misreported or unclear, such as placing the glasshouse in the north rather than along the southern edge. A more precise overview and clearer coverage of the café and other relocations would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph about the 1920 plan, and a paragraph about the present layout. This gives the reader a basic chronological route through the information, and transitions such as “To start with” and “Firstly” help signal the stages. However, progression within the descriptive paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the sentence beginning “On the north” and the unclear sequence of features around the entrance. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “both side” and “near it” do not always make the locations clear. Organise each paragraph by area—for example, north, centre, then south—and use precise location references to make comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “stage for musicians,” “rose garden,” “amphitheatre,” and “south east corner,” so the reader can identify many of the features. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “Radical changes.” However, the range and control are limited by repeated general wording such as “some” and “change,” awkward combinations such as “removal of fountain,” and several spelling errors, including “changs,” “Futher,” and “unground.” Some choices also make the meaning unclear, as in “in the lioft of fountain.” Use accurate location phrases and verbs such as “was replaced by,” “was relocated to,” and “occupied the north-east corner” to describe the changes more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the comparison “Park entrance from both side remained at the same place, whereas…” This shows an effort to connect changes rather than list every feature separately. However, some sentence patterns are incomplete or inaccurate, for example, “The principle change in the removal…” lacks a complete verb structure, and “in the center of the park a had a big fountain” has an unnecessary article and an unclear subject. There are also errors in articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “two entrance” and “both side.” Review basic sentence construction and use consistent past forms for the 1920 plan and present forms for today. More accurate clauses would make your comparisons easier to understand.

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