Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The two plans illustrates the comparison of public park which was first opened in 1920.These two plans main difference are the past and present.

Overall the graph demonstrates old and today generation of the street.There are many changes between two plans.

In these plans 1920 park is the old version of the Green Park.In contrast,todays plans change the previous plan of the Grange park.In center of the park 1920 version one fountain was there but if you see in today there are rose garden just bottom of the street and also seats available there are many.But in past there are merely sits available.The major difference is rose garden are available all of there which was sorrounded by ELDON STREET.

However apart from you see ELDON STREET name is same but the main difference is stage for musicians in the past and Ampitheatre for concerts.Whole concerts are capture in the left side of the ELDON STREET.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify that the plans show the park in the past and today, and you mention several genuine changes, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden and the musicians’ stage becoming a concert amphitheatre. However, the response only partially reports the main features. The overview that there are “many changes” is too general, and some details are inaccurate or unclear: the central rose garden is not “just bottom of the street,” and the statement that rose gardens are “all of there” does not reflect their specific locations. Important changes such as the café, children’s play area, water feature and underground car-park entrance are omitted. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons of the main areas would make the summary more complete and relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to compare the two plans, so there is some basic organisation. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from an overview to well-grouped details. The opening repeats the idea of comparison, while “Overall the graph demonstrates old and today generation of the street” does not provide a clear summary of the park’s changes. Later, details shift between the centre, Eldon Street and the western area without a consistent spatial order. Linking phrases such as “In contrast” and “However” are used, but the relationships they introduce are sometimes unclear. Organise the report into an overview followed by comparisons grouped by location, and use precise references such as “in the north-east” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing plans, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “stage for musicians” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These terms show an attempt to describe the map rather than relying entirely on general language. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow: “old and today generation of the street,” “rose garden just bottom of the street,” and “Whole concerts are capture” are not natural descriptions. There are also spelling errors, including “sorrounded” and “Ampitheatre,” and “sits” is used where “seats” is intended. Build a more precise set of location and change expressions, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. For example, “The two plans illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “These two plans main difference are” has problems with possession, number and agreement. Several sentences lack clear grammatical structure, including “In center of the park 1920 version one fountain was there” and “Whole concerts are capture in the left side.” Articles and prepositions are also often missing or incorrectly used, as in “in center” and “in the left side.” Use straightforward, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement, articles and past-versus-present forms; then add more complex comparisons once those patterns are secure.

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