Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrate the chnage that have taken place in Grange Park between 1920 and present day.

Overall, the park has been siginificantly modernised, with several new fasilities added, while some ofiginal features,sucha as rose gardens have been retained. The stage for musicians and pnds for water plants replaced by more modern recreational fasilities.

Regarding the first map, in 1920, the park had a stage for musicians in westren part of park, while a fountain was in the center of the park. There were three rose gardens, two of them at the top and one in the bottom of the park. Pond for water plants was situated in the right corner of the map, whereas a glasshouse was located in the southern- eastern area. There were several seating areas were arranged around the park. Entrance were provided on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street.

Today, the park has unergone several changes. The stage for musician replaced by Ampthiheatre for concerts, while fountain replaced by single roese garden surrounded by seating areas. The pond water plants area chaneged into children's play area. Furthermore, Water faature area added in the bottom right corner. Another new feature is an underground entrance for car park on the eastern side of the park. Glasshouse is no longer present and cafe added as a new feature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You give a clear overview of the park’s modernisation and identify the main replacements, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond becoming a play area, and the western stage area becoming an amphitheatre. You also cover the café, water feature and underground car-park entrance, so the response addresses the key changes across both plans. Some details are generalised: for example, “two of them at the top and one in the bottom” does not precisely locate the three original rose gardens, and the seating changes are not described beyond saying there were several areas. More precise comparisons of locations and retained features would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised in a clear sequence: an introduction, an overview, a description of the 1920 plan and then the present-day changes. This gives the reader a logical progression, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “whereas,” “Furthermore” and “Another new feature” help connect information. The comparison between the two maps is generally easy to follow, particularly when you explain what replaced the stage, fountain and pond. However, the present-day paragraph sometimes lists changes without grouping them by area, and “Regarding the first map” followed by “Today” makes the comparison somewhat separate rather than consistently integrated. Grouping north, central and southern changes would improve cohesion further.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “located,” “situated,” “southern-eastern area,” “surrounded by” and “replaced by,” which helps convey positions and changes. However, spelling errors are frequent and noticeable, including “chnage,” “siginificantly,” “fasilities,” “westren,” “Ampthiheatre” and “faature.” There are also inaccurate or awkward word choices and collocations, such as “single roese garden” and “underground entrance for car park,” which reduce precision. The range is sufficient to describe the main features, but repeated reliance on “feature,” “area” and “replaced” limits flexibility. Proofread spelling carefully and use more precise terms such as “facility,” “central rectangular garden” and “car-park access.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, using contrast clauses such as “while” and “whereas” and a passive construction in “surrounded by seating areas.” However, grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships unclear. Examples include “the change that have taken place,” where the verb does not agree with “change,” and “The stage for musician replaced by,” which lacks the auxiliary verb needed for the passive. Articles and sentence structure are also problematic in “Pond for water plants was situated” and “There were several seating areas were arranged.” Aim to form complete clauses, check subject–verb agreement, and use articles consistently. More accurate control of these basic patterns would make your varied sentence attempts clearer.

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