Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plan shows the public park called the Grange park at the time it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. There are many changes made in the park when compared with its previous condition.

Talking about the entrance when the park was first opened it was has remained the same however there is an addition which is the entrance for underground park for the cars. There were seats all over the park in 1920 although it has changed today surrounding the rose garden. The number of rose gardens have decreased today which is one at the center of the park and the other besides the amphitheatre. The stage for musicians has now changed to the amphitheatre for hosting concerts. The fountain and pond has been replaced with a single water feature. Keeping children in minds there has been a children's designated play area added to the park today along with the cafe which was not present earlier.

Overall we can say that there are many modifications made to the park keeping people's requirements in consideration.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main purpose of the plans and report several important changes, including the new café and children’s play area, the conversion of the musicians’ stage to a concert amphitheatre, and the addition of an underground car-park entrance. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the rose gardens are not reduced to one central garden and another beside the amphitheatre; today there are two, in the north-west and centre. The fountain and pond were not replaced by a single water feature: the central fountain became a rose garden, while the pond site became the play area. The overview also gives a general explanation of why changes were made rather than clearly summarising the main spatial transformation. More precise coverage of the garden, seating and replaced features would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph describing changes, and a concluding overview. The ideas are generally relevant and can be followed, with links such as “however,” “although” and “along with.” However, the main description moves between entrances, seating, gardens and facilities without a clear spatial or thematic order, and some connections are difficult to interpret. For example, “the entrance … has remained the same however there is an addition” combines two points without clear punctuation or explanation. The final sentence repeats the idea that the park changed but does not add a useful summary. Grouping changes by area or by what was replaced, and using clearer referencing, would improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing changes, including “replaced,” “surrounding,” “amphitheatre” and “designated play area.” These choices help communicate the general subject, and most meaning remains understandable. Some wording is imprecise or unnatural, however: “entrance for underground park for the cars” is unclear, “besides the amphitheatre” is not the best way to locate a feature, and “keeping children in minds” is an awkward expression. “Previous condition” is also less natural than a direct reference to the park in 1920. Aim for precise map vocabulary such as “located,” “in the north-east corner” and “converted into,” and avoid conversational explanations of the planners’ motives unless the plans support them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “although” and “which,” and the main message is usually understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless make parts of the account awkward or unclear. In “it was has remained the same,” the verb forms are combined incorrectly; use “it has remained the same.” “The number of rose gardens have decreased” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “The fountain and pond has been replaced” also needs plural agreement. There are further problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “the cafe” and the long entrance sentence joined with “however” without suitable punctuation. Check verb forms and agreement, and divide longer sentences into clearly controlled clauses.

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