Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map comprises the major changes took place in a public park called Grange park compared to 1920 and today.

To begin with, it was seen that the fountain in the center of the park was demolished. Instead, rose garden situated in the left corner of the garden was placed in the center. Moreover, five seats in the park were removed and arranged around the rose garden. An amphitheartre for concerts was constructed in the western side of the park by removing the stage for musicians . The rose garden and pond for water plants in the north eastern side of park were converted to square shaped cafe and children's play area respectively. The most notable addition was the water feature. It was built by demolishing glass house in the south eastern side of the park. There was no change in both the entrance of the park.

To sum up, the Grange park at Arnold avenue was well developed with new additions which attract the visitors because of ite modern infrastructure.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the removal of the central fountain, the new western amphitheatre, and the replacement of the pond and glasshouse. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the central rose garden is described as being in the “left corner,” whereas it is in the centre, and the café is not described as square-shaped in the plan. The statement that “five seats” were removed also misrepresents the layout: seats now surround the central garden, and other seating remains. The overview focuses on development but does not clearly summarise the main pattern of change. Include the café and children’s play area accurately, and explain that the entrances on the north and south remain while the park’s facilities were reorganised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an opening statement to a sequence of changes and a concluding sentence. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Instead,” and “To sum up” help signal relationships between points. However, the main body presents many changes in one paragraph, and the conclusion adds an unsupported claim about attracting visitors rather than summarising the map. Some connections are also unclear: “The rose garden and pond … were converted to square shaped cafe and children’s play area respectively” makes the locations difficult to follow. Grouping changes by area—for example, the western and central features, then the northern and southern areas—would create clearer progression and make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of map-related vocabulary, including “demolished,” “constructed,” “converted,” and “addition,” which helps describe changes. Some less common choices are not used accurately or naturally: “the map comprises the major changes” is an awkward opening, and “well developed” and “modern infrastructure” are vague for describing a park plan. There are also spelling errors in “amphitheartre” and “ite,” and “glass house” is better written as “glasshouse.” Aim for precise location and change vocabulary, such as “in the north-east corner,” “was replaced by,” and “remained unchanged.” This would make the descriptions more natural and specific without relying on general evaluative language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including a passive construction in “An amphitheatre … was constructed” and a relative clause in “which attract the visitors.” The main changes are generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. The opening, “The map comprises the major changes took place,” combines structures incorrectly; use “The maps show the major changes that took place.” Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent, as in “in western side” and “in south eastern side of the park.” In the final sentence, “which attract” does not agree with the singular idea of development, and the sentence structure is awkward. Check article use, agreement, and sentence boundaries, while retaining your attempts at complex forms.

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