Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plans illustrate the development changes of a public park in 1920 and the same park at present.

Overall, grange park grew over a period of time. Many significant changes was observed, rose garden was replaced by cafe. Seats were removed from three sides of a park and it were placed in the center of park, near the rose garden. Arnold Avenue and Eldon street entrance remained the same. Moreover, stage for musicians was replaced with Amphitheatre for concert while, pond for water plants with children's play area and glass house with water feature, with the addition of Entrance underground car park near by.

In 1920, Fountain was present in the center of the park. Entrance was present on the north-south region of park. Seats were present on both sides of two rose gardens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important changes, including the replacement of the pond by a children’s play area, the glasshouse by a water feature, and the musicians’ stage by an amphitheatre. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: the park did not simply “grow,” and seats were not moved to the centre; the central fountain was replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats. Some key features are omitted or unclear, such as the café’s location and the underground car-park entrance. The final paragraph gives only a brief account of the 1920 layout and does not describe the present-day plan in comparable detail. The response is also 16 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail available to summarise the maps fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a paragraph about the original park. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph covers only a few 1920 features and does not systematically compare the two plans. The overview also combines many changes in one long sequence, making relationships between them difficult to follow. Linking words such as “Moreover” and “while” are attempted, but the construction “while, pond for water plants with children’s play area” is incomplete. Organise the details by area or by major change, and use clear comparison phrases to connect each original feature with its replacement.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of map-related vocabulary, including “replaced,” “entrance,” “rose garden,” “pond for water plants” and “amphitheatre.” These choices make the main subject understandable, and some terms are appropriately specific. However, several expressions are imprecise or awkward, such as “development changes,” “grew over a period of time” and “entrance was present on the north-south region.” “Seats were removed from three sides” also misrepresents the layout rather than describing the seating arrangement accurately. Aim for precise location language and natural collocations, for example, “the park underwent several changes” and “seating was arranged around the central garden.” Check spelling and capitalisation of names such as Grange Park and Eldon Street.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at more complex sentences, particularly in the overview, but control is inconsistent. Agreement errors appear in “Many significant changes was observed” and “it were placed,” while articles are missing or misused in phrases such as “in center of park” and “on north-south region.” The sentence beginning “Moreover” contains an incomplete comparison: “pond for water plants with children’s play area.” Punctuation also makes the long overview difficult to parse, especially around “while.” Use complete clauses with parallel structures, such as “The pond was replaced by a play area, while the glasshouse became a water feature.” More accurate agreement, articles and sentence boundaries would make the comparisons clearer.

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