Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart depicts the map if public park Arnold avenue in 1920, when it was opened first and the same park today.

Overall, major crucial changes had been done . The most significant change is an underground car parking along with amphitheatre for concerts.

New infrastructure had been introduced whereas, many of them is eradicated. The entrance had remained unchanged but additional entrance underground car parking had been made . There were three rose gardens in the park but currently there are only two of them. The seats which were at periphery of the park is replaced and seating area had made around all directions of rose garden at the middle . Stage for musicians had been replaced by an amphitheatre for concerts. Glasshouse is eliminated and cafe is opened in the north beside children's play area. Pond is shifted downwards. The fountain and glasshouse was eliminated whereas only positions of other infrastructure had been replaced.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from a park with a fountain and musicians’ stage to one with a central rose garden and concert amphitheatre, and you note several changes to facilities. The overview also highlights the new underground car-park entrance. These are relevant comparisons and show a good grasp of the plans. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the pond was not shifted downwards; it was replaced by a children’s play area in the north-east. The café is north of the play area, and the water feature occupies the former glasshouse site. You also say the peripheral seats were replaced, although seating remains around the park as well as surrounding the central garden. More precise location-based comparisons would make the account more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, an overall statement and a body paragraph, and it generally moves from broad changes to individual features. This gives it some organisation. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow: changes to entrances, seating, the stage, glasshouse, café and pond are presented in a sequence that does not consistently group locations or distinguish what was removed from what replaced it. Linking words such as “whereas” are used awkwardly, and the final sentence repeats earlier information rather than adding a clear comparison. Organise the details by area—for example, north, centre and south—and use clear references such as “in the north-east” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “rose gardens,” “amphitheatre,” “periphery” and “infrastructure,” and the reader can usually identify the features being discussed. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “major crucial changes,” “infrastructure … eradicated,” and “pond is shifted downwards.” “The map” or “plans” is more appropriate than “chart,” and “car park” is clearer than “car parking” when naming the facility. Some repetition of “replaced” and “eliminated” also limits flexibility. Aim for precise verbs such as “was converted into,” “was replaced by,” and “remained in place,” matched carefully to the changes shown.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, including contrasts with “whereas” and clauses describing changes. Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and agreement are noticeable. For example, “many of them is eradicated” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “The seats … is replaced” has the same agreement problem. Past and present forms are also inconsistent in “had remained unchanged” and “currently there are only two of them.” Articles and punctuation need attention, as in “an underground car parking” and the extra spaces before full stops. Use past simple for the 1920 plan and present simple for today, and check each subject–verb pairing.

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