Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The plan illustrate the changes that took place in the Grange Park between 1920 and present.

Overall, the significant changes had been made. There are newly introduced building, conversions, relocations and redevelopments in today's plan in comparision to old one.

First of all, the fountain in the centre of the park is demolised. The rose garderns on the left, upon entering from Eldon and Arnold avenue are shifted to middle of park. Furthermore, not only the total area has been expanded but also the seats from the left portion of park are relocated at each side of the rose garden. Additionally, the musician stage in the west is converted into amphitheatre for concets with one rose garden situated adjacent to it in the top north direction.

Moreover, the place previously dedicated to rose garden in top east side is presently converted into cafe for refreshment. The greehouse and the pond for water supply to plants are converted into water feature and play area for children respectively. Whereas, one entrance from underground parking leading to the water featrure is introduced in present plant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main transformation from the 1920 layout to the present, including the central fountain’s replacement, the western amphitheatre, the café, children’s play area and water feature. The overview also signals that the park has undergone several kinds of change, and most location comparisons are grounded in the plans. However, some details are inaccurate or too general: the rose gardens were not all shifted to the middle; the north-west garden remains in place, while the central garden is new and surrounded by seats. The claim that the park’s total area expanded is unsupported. Mentioning the unchanged entrances and the new underground car-park entrance would make the comparison more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall sequence: an introduction and overview are followed by details of changes in different parts of the park. Linking expressions such as “First of all,” “Furthermore” and “Moreover” help signal progression, and the reader can generally follow the comparisons. To strengthen cohesion, group related changes more deliberately by area or by what was retained, replaced and added. Some transitions feel mechanical, particularly the repeated additive links, while “Whereas” begins a fragment-like final clause rather than a balanced comparison. The overview could also distinguish more clearly between features that were relocated and those that were replaced. More precise referencing would help readers track which rose garden or entrance is being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “converted,” “relocated,” “amphitheatre” and “adjacent,” which allows you to describe several types of change. Some less common choices are not used accurately or naturally, however: “demolised” is not the right form for describing the fountain’s removal, and “the rose gardens … are shifted to middle” gives an inaccurate impression of their locations. There are also spelling errors in “garderns,” “concets,” “greehouse” and “featrure,” alongside less suitable phrases such as “water supply to plants.” Aim for precise map language such as “replaced by,” “remains in the north-west” and “pond for water plants.” These refinements would improve accuracy and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including “not only … but also” and a relative clause in “an entrance … leading to the water feature.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. The opening needs subject–verb agreement and an article: “The plan illustrates changes that took place in Grange Park.” Tense and number are also inconsistent in “the significant changes had been made” and “the rose gardens … are shifted”; use a consistent present or past description. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is incomplete as written, and “one entrance from underground parking” needs clearer article and noun phrasing. Check sentence boundaries and punctuation, especially where you connect several changes in one sentence.

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