Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The maps illustrate a public park when it was opened for the first time in 1920 and how it is today.

Overall, fountain is replaced by rose garden,pond into children's playgroundstage into the theatre for concert, and placed a water feature and seating area on the same place.

In 1920, there was fountain in the centre of the park which is now converted into the rose garden. There were many rose gardens before but now there are only two rose gardens, one at the centre of park and other on the left corner of park. there were also many seats in different areas in park but now there is a proper seating area near the rose graden which is in front of the entrances. There is a cafe opened now in the park. The pond for water plant is removed and children's area is being opened there. There was a glasshouse which is now appeared as water feature. The stage for musician is renovated as amphitheatre for concert, while entrances are on same place where it was in 1920.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation in the park, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the pond site becoming a children’s play area, and the former stage area becoming an amphitheatre. You also note the café and the water feature, so the response covers the key changes and gives an overall summary. This is a strong, relevant account, although some details are unclear or imprecise: the central rose garden is not simply a seating area, but is surrounded by seats, and the amphitheatre occupies the western area that also included the south-west rose garden. The statement that there are “only two rose gardens” is accurate, but the locations could be described more precisely. More exact comparisons would make the overview and supporting details more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing changes. It also uses some helpful links, such as “Overall,” “but now,” and “while,” to compare the two plans. However, progression within the body is not consistently clear, as several changes are packed into long sentences and the sequence shifts between locations. The overview sentence is especially difficult to follow because its list runs together (“pond into children’s playgroundstage into the theatre”). Some references, such as “the same place” and “there,” require the reader to infer which feature or location is meant. Grouping changes by area—north, centre, and south—would create clearer progression and make the comparisons easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing map changes, including “replaced,” “converted,” “removed,” and “renovated,” and the reader can generally identify the park features being discussed. However, the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or unnatural. For example, “theatre for concert” does not accurately name the mapped feature, which is an “amphitheatre for concerts,” while “children’s area” is less precise than “children’s play area.” “Water plant” and “rose graden” also show word-form or spelling problems. Repetition of “there was” and “now” further limits variety. More precise map vocabulary and accurate collocations would help you describe the changes with greater clarity and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and clauses such as “which is now converted into the rose garden.” However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors sometimes make the relationships between features difficult to follow. Examples include missing articles in “there was fountain” and “in the centre of park,” inconsistent tense in “There is a cafe opened now,” and the faulty construction “which is now appeared as water feature.” The overview also lacks clear sentence boundaries, with ideas joined together without punctuation. Use past tense for the 1920 plan and present tense for today, and check articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries carefully.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.