Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two plans show Grange park in 1920 and today.

Overall, the park change a lot. Many feactures add and shape different.

First of all in old park maps we had fountain in middle of park west of the fountain we saw stage for musicians east side of fountain we had pond for water plants south side on this we saw seats with glasshouse than entrance left side of entrance we had more seats with rose garden we had total 5 place of seats and 3 rose garden and two entrance.

Today the map of park are totally change we have 2 entrance like old. But in middle of park we have rose garden and we have seats place around them. Left side of it we have amphitheatre for concerts up side we have rose garden. Right side we have cafe with entrace and childrens play area attach with cafe and we have water feature on the right side os Eldon streer entrance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two plans and give a broad overview that the park has changed substantially, then describe several important features in both periods. The central fountain becoming a rose garden, the western concert amphitheatre, and the children’s play area replacing the pond are relevant comparisons. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the 1920 pond was north-east, not east of the fountain, and the glasshouse was on the southern edge rather than simply “south side” of the pond. The present-day café is not described as having an entrance, and the underground car-park entrance is omitted. The overview is also very general. More precise locations and a clearer summary of the main changes would make the report more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a brief overview, a paragraph about the original plan, and one about the present layout. This gives the reader a general sense of the comparison. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because many features are joined in long sequences, such as “west of the fountain… east side… south side.” Directional references such as “left side,” “up side,” and “right side” are not consistently anchored to the map, so relationships between features can be unclear. Linking is also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “we have.” Grouping changes by area or by what was replaced, and using clearer transitions such as “in contrast” and “in the north-east,” would improve the flow and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fountain,” “rose garden,” “stage for musicians,” “amphitheatre,” and “water feature,” which helps identify the map features. However, the range of language for describing change and location is limited, with repeated phrases such as “we have” and “side of.” Several spelling errors, including “feactures,” “entrace,” and “streer,” reduce accuracy, while phrases such as “shape different” and “seats place” are not natural English collocations. Aim to use a wider set of precise map-description terms, such as “located,” “replaced,” “adjacent to,” and “in the south-east corner,” and check spelling carefully. This would make the description clearer and more appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “the park change a lot” lacks the correct verb form, while “the map of park are totally change” has problems with articles, agreement, and verb construction. The long sentence beginning “First of all in old park maps” contains several clauses without clear punctuation, making the relationships between features hard to follow. There is also inconsistent use of articles and plurals, as in “we have 2 entrance.” Practise accurate present and past forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries. Shorter, complete sentences would help you communicate the locations and changes more reliably.

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