Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps display the comparison between the park condition when it first opened and how it look today.

Overall, seating area has been expanded. The water feature and amphitheatre for concerts are newly added in the park. In contrast, rose graden and entrance remained at the same location. The underground water car park is the latest addition in the map.

In 1920 map, there was a fountain and stage for musicians in the central area of park. There were three sitting area along the wall of map. Adjacent to this, there were 2 rose gardens located on the either side of arnold avenue entrance. Moreover, there was a small pond for water plants in the corner. A glasshouse was placed near the eldon street entrance.

In today map, pond area is replaced with children play area and cafe. The amphitheatre for concerts is latest addition in left side of the map. The seating area have been expanded around rose garden. Furthermore, the water feature and underground car park entrance are latest addition. In contrast entrance remained at the smae location.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main change from a traditional park layout to one with newer recreational facilities, and you compare several features across the two maps. The overview mentions the amphitheatre and water feature, while the body correctly notes the former pond becoming a play area and the glasshouse being replaced. However, some important details are inaccurate or unclear: the central fountain is replaced by a rose garden, not simply described as part of the new seating arrangement, and the café occupies the site of a northern rose garden rather than the pond area. The claim that seating has expanded is also not clearly supported beyond the seats surrounding the central garden. A more precise overview and fuller coverage of the central changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the 1920 and present-day layouts. This makes the comparison easy to follow, and phrases such as “In contrast” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships between points. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Adjacent to this” does not clearly identify what the rose gardens are adjacent to, and the sentence about the pond being replaced by both the play area and café combines changes in different parts of the park. Grouping features by location or pairing each former feature with its replacement would create a more consistent progression. Avoid repeating the entrance comparison at the end when it has already appeared in the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “fountain,” “stage for musicians,” “rose gardens,” “pond,” and “amphitheatre,” so the reader can understand the main features. There is also some attempt to vary expressions, such as “latest addition” and “replaced.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “park condition” is unnatural for describing a plan, “sitting area” is less suitable than “seating,” and “underground water car park” changes the meaning of the labelled underground car park. Spelling errors such as “graden” and “smae,” along with inconsistent capitalisation of street names, reduce accuracy. Use standard map-description phrases and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some more complex forms, including “when it first opened” and “In contrast,” and the main message is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement, articles, and verb forms. For example, “how it look today” should be “how it looks today,” while “the seating area have been expanded” needs subject–verb agreement (“has been expanded”). Articles are also missing in phrases such as “in central area of park,” and “entrance remained” needs an article or plural form. The sentence “rose graden and entrance remained at the same location” also needs plural agreement because several gardens and entrances are being discussed. More consistent control of these patterns would improve accuracy.

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