Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I find it quite interesting to see how Grange Park has evolved from 1920.

Although both parks share similaraties from the 1920 layout, such as the rose gardens, seating space, a water feature and an area for entertainment, Grange Park today, give us a sense of inclusivity and an undeniable invitation to fully enjoy the park's features.

I believe the addition of a children's play area and a café draws young and old whereas the 1920's layout wasn't necessarily child friendly.

The park today give a family the opportunity to go to the park and both the mother and her children can enjoy the park whereas the 1920 layout is more suitable for older people without any children. The new layout has a children's play area whereas the 1920 layout didn't have anything for the children to do.

The new layout is inviting for all ages and therefore more people will visit the Park. The way Grange Park evolved is a big advantages for all generations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response identifies a broad contrast between the park’s earlier and present-day uses, and it correctly notes the addition of a children’s play area and café. However, it only partially reports the visual information: most of the response discusses who might enjoy the park rather than describing the actual changes and locations. Important features are omitted, including the central fountain being replaced by a rose garden, the western amphitheatre, and the changes in the north-east and south-east corners. The claim that both layouts share “a water feature” is imprecise, as the earlier plan has a fountain and pond, while the present plan has a water feature in the south-east. A concise overview followed by specific, accurate comparisons would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic progression from a general introduction to comments about the park’s appeal, and paragraph breaks provide some separation. However, the organisation does not guide the reader through a comparison of the two plans: the same point about children and families is repeated in several sentences, while the physical changes are not grouped or sequenced. Linking phrases such as “Although” and “whereas” are attempted, but the contrast is sometimes unclear, and “whereas” is repeated without adding new information. Organise the response around an overview and then compare the main areas of the park, using clear references to the 1920 and present-day layouts.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “evolved,” “rose gardens,” “seating space,” and “children’s play area,” and the general meaning is usually clear. There is also an attempt to use more descriptive language, such as “an undeniable invitation,” though this is less suitable for a factual map summary. Several expressions are vague or repetitive, particularly “enjoy the park” and “layout,” and “a water feature” does not precisely distinguish the features shown in each plan. There are also noticeable word-form or spelling problems, including “similaraties” and “a big advantages.” Use more precise terms for locations and changes, such as “in the north-east corner” or “was replaced by,” and favour neutral descriptive vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts a mixture of simple sentences and more complex structures, including a concessive opening with “Although” and comparisons using “whereas.” Meaning remains generally understandable, but errors in agreement and sentence construction are noticeable. For example, “Grange Park today, give us” should use a singular verb and does not need the comma; later, “The park today give a family” repeats the agreement error. The long sentence beginning “The park today give a family the opportunity” also becomes awkward as it joins several ideas. The final sentence has a number-agreement problem in “a big advantages.” Check subject–verb agreement and singular/plural forms, and divide long comparisons into clearer sentences while retaining some varied structures.

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