Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagrams illustrate the layout of a Grange Park, How it looks like in 1920 and after transformaton.

Overall, a Grange Park has contains facility of seats around the walls, rose garden and entrance on both side in 1920. while Amphitheatre for concerts , sports area for kids and underground entrance have been newly introduced in today's plan.

In 1920, Grande Park has a entrance on both side , one linked with Arnold Avenue and second is linked with Eldon Street. The middle section of the park contain a Foyar, which contain only a fountain. Few Facilities for individuals also present including seats with the left wall and flower's area near them. A reservior of a water for plant has also be seen in old layout opposite to the Glass house.

Since then, a Grange Park undergoes a significant re-development. Both entrances point remain present at their old loactions but new underground entrance has been introduced near the right cornor of a park. A former fountain has been replaced with a rose garden, whose contain seats all around it. Old site for the musicians has been replaced with advanced structure of sitting known as "Amphitheatre for concert". A Former Glass house and a water reservior have been interchanged with the Water feature and the Children's play area respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response gives a clear overview of major changes, including the new amphitheatre, children’s play area and underground car-park entrance, and it correctly notes that the central fountain became a rose garden with seats around it. It also compares several former and current uses, such as the musicians’ stage and glasshouse. This covers the task well, though some details are incomplete or unclear: the café and the north-west rose garden are omitted, and the description of the 1920 seating and gardens is vague. The claim that the water reservoir and children’s play area were “interchanged” is inaccurate; the play area replaced the pond, while the water feature replaced the glasshouse. More precise coverage of these locations would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a description of the original plan and a final paragraph on redevelopment. The progression from the 1920 layout to the present is generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “Since then” help signal the comparison. However, some links and references are unclear. For example, “opposite to the Glass house” does not clearly identify the pond’s position, and “Both entrances point remain present” makes the relationship between the entrances difficult to follow. The overview also combines several features in a long, awkward sentence. Use clearer location-based sequencing and more precise referencing to make the organisation smoother and less dependent on broad transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

There is enough vocabulary to describe the plans and changes, including “re-development,” “replaced,” “entrance” and “Amphitheatre.” Some less common terms are attempted, but inaccurate word choice and spelling reduce precision: “Foyar” is not the correct term for the park’s central area, “reservior” is misspelled, and “sports area for kids” does not accurately describe a children’s play area. Phrases such as “facility of seats around the walls” and “advanced structure of sitting” are also unnatural collocations. These choices sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended feature. Prefer standard map-description vocabulary and check spelling and collocations, while retaining the useful range of change-related verbs already present.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “a rose garden, whose contain seats all around it” and a contrast introduced by “Since then.” However, grammatical errors occur throughout and sometimes make relationships unclear. Examples include “a Grange Park has contains,” “the middle section … contain,” and “a entrance on both side”; these show problems with verb forms, agreement and articles. The sentence beginning “Overall” also has faulty sentence boundaries and capitalisation, while “Both entrances point remain present” is structurally unclear. Aim first for accurate simple clauses, then add complex forms with correct agreement and clause structure. Careful proofreading for tense, articles and singular/plural forms would improve control.

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