Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The supplied maps duagram illustrate the development of public park in the current age and when it was opned in 1920. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily appearant that it has introduced many features for better enjoyment, while it also replaced slots such as fountain, stage for musicians and pound for the water planting.

Grange park in 1920, had two entrances in the top and bottom of it. Likewise, it also had a fountain the middle, and also a stage for only musician. Although it had a glasshouse in the right lower corner, it a pond of water which is used for planting. Furthermore, it had lot of seats for seating on different locations and also some rose gardens.

Currently, it has some of previous features such as seats and rose gardens, the entrances remained same on the same locations. Although the music stage is replaced by amphitheatre for concerts, fountain in the middle is replaced by a spacious rose garden which is surrounded by seats, but the glasshouse is replaced by the water feature. However, pound is removed and replaced by children's playing area on upper right corner. It also introduced a cafe beside it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation from the 1920 park to today and make several accurate comparisons: the central fountain becomes a rose garden surrounded by seats, the western music stage gives way to an amphitheatre, and the pond area becomes a children’s play area. Your overview also recognises that the park has gained or changed facilities. However, some important details are unclear or inaccurate: the 1920 map shows three rose gardens, and the current map retains the north-west garden and adds a café east of the north entrance. The glasshouse was in the south-east, but the water feature is there today; the underground car-park entrance is also omitted. The response covers the task, but some features are less fully reported than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression: an opening overview is followed by a description of the original park and then its current layout. This makes the comparison generally easy to follow, and words such as “Currently” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. However, the links within sentences are sometimes awkward or repetitive, particularly the repeated “Although” constructions in the final paragraph. Some references are also unclear: “it” in “it also had a stage” and “beside it” at the end do not identify the feature precisely. Grouping changes by location or pairing each former feature with its replacement would create a more consistent progression and make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant map vocabulary, including “entrances,” “rose gardens,” “amphitheatre,” “glasshouse” and “water feature,” and you attempt more descriptive language such as “replaced” and “surrounded.” This gives you enough range to communicate the main changes. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice problems reduce precision: “duagram,” “opned” and “appearant” are misspelled, while “pound” is used instead of “pond.” Phrases such as “for better enjoyment,” “stage for only musician” and “children’s playing area” are also unnatural or imprecise. Aim for accurate, conventional map language and check spelling carefully; this would make your descriptions more fluent and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “while,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms are frequent enough to make some descriptions awkward. For example, “it is readily appearant” lacks the correct verb form, and “Although it had a glasshouse …, it a pond” is incomplete and does not clearly express the relationship between the features. There are also problems with articles and number in “a stage for only musician” and “had lot of seats.” Review subject–verb agreement, complete clause construction, and article use. Shorter, accurately controlled comparisons would help you express the map changes more clearly.

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