Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagrams compare the changes made to a public park when it first opened in 1920 and how it looks today.

Overall, there are several changes done in a park. Some facilities have been removed, while some has been replaced. Amphitheater for concerts, water feature and children's play area has been added, while entrances remained the same.

Rose garden has now been added in the center of a park, replacing the fountain, also seats have been added around the rose garden which was previously on the western side of a park. Amphitheater has now been added in the left side of a park by removing stage for musicians. Rose garden from bottom left of park was now been removed.

Rose garden on the right side of the entrance has now been converted into the cafe. Pond for water plants have been demolished and the area has now been occupied by Children's play area. Furthermore, water feature has now been added in the south eastern side of a park, replacing the glasshouse. While the entrances on both northern and southern side remains same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response identifies the main transformation from a fountain to a central rose garden and reports several important changes, including the concert amphitheatre, play area, café and water feature. It also correctly notes that the north and south entrances remain. These details address the task, but some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: the central rose garden was not previously on the western side; it replaced the fountain. The north-west rose garden remains, rather than being newly added, and the café replaces a rose garden east of the northern entrance. The overview mentions additions and unchanged entrances but could more clearly summarise the overall reorganisation and distinguish retained features from replacements. More precise location-based comparisons would make the account more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about the central and western areas, then the northern and south-eastern areas. This gives the reader a basic route through the changes. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview says facilities were “removed” and “replaced” without specifying the main pattern, and the body sometimes shifts between locations and changes without a clear organising principle. Linking words such as “Furthermore” and “While” are used, but the final “While” clause is not integrated into a complete sentence. Some references, including “the area” and “the left side,” are less precise than the map’s directional labels. Grouping changes by area and using clearer comparisons would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range of map-related vocabulary, including “replacing,” “occupied,” “entrances,” and “south eastern,” and the main changes are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific terms such as “Amphitheater for concerts” and “Pond for water plants.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “changes done” is unnatural, “demolished” is not the best description of a pond being replaced, and “left side” is less suitable than a compass direction. “Rose garden has now been added” also misrepresents a garden that remained in place. Use standard map language such as “converted into,” “located in the north-west,” and “was replaced by” to improve precision and naturalness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex forms, including “while” and “by removing,” and its meaning is usually recoverable. However, some errors in agreement, articles and verb forms recur. For example, “some has been replaced” should be “some have been replaced,” while “Amphitheater … and children’s play area has been added” requires a plural verb. The phrase “Rose garden has now been added” needs an article, and “was now been removed” combines incompatible verb forms. The final sentence beginning “While” is a dependent clause and needs to be joined to a main clause. More consistent past-versus-present phrasing and careful checking of subject–verb agreement would improve accuracy.

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