Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two pictures illustrate Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920 and as on today.
In 1920, park had two different ways for entry, one from Arnold Avenue and another at Eldon Street.
When you enter from south side, on right side of the park, you will find a glasshouse and seats.
Left side had also seats before a Rose Garden, Fountain was in the middle of park. A stage for musicians on the west side of the Fountain. North side there were two Rose gardens and a Pond for water plants.
On the other hand, today park has been reshaped, Fountain replaces by Rose Garden in the middle.
Musicians Stage is replaced by Amphitheatre for concerts, Children's play area on the place of Pond.
Cafe at place of Rose Garden,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify the two time periods and report several relevant changes, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden, the musicians’ stage being replaced by an amphitheatre, and the pond becoming a children’s play area. However, the response covers the plans only partially: it omits important present-day features such as the café, water feature, underground car-park entrance and seating around the central garden. Some 1920 details are also unclear or inaccurate; for example, the north side had a pond and two rose gardens, but the response does not clearly locate them. There is no overall summary of the main pattern of change, and the response is 18 words below the required minimum. Develop a concise overview and compare the main areas more completely.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic chronological structure: it first describes the 1920 park and then introduces the present-day plan with “On the other hand”. This gives the reader a simple way to follow the comparison. However, the progression within each paragraph is not consistently clear, and several details are presented as disconnected statements, such as “A stage for musicians on the west side of the Fountain.” The final paragraph ends abruptly after “Cafe at place of Rose Garden,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Use complete, connected sentences and organise the information by area or by major change. A fuller final paragraph would also help create a more balanced progression from the original layout to the current one.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “entrance”, “glasshouse”, “Fountain”, “Pond for water plants” and “Amphitheatre for concerts”. These terms make the basic subject matter understandable. However, the range of comparison and location language is limited, and some phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “two different ways for entry”, “on the place of Pond” and “as on today”. Repetition of “side” and “place” also limits precision. Build a wider set of accurate map-description phrases, such as “in the north-east corner”, “along the southern edge” and “was replaced by”. Check spelling and consistent capitalisation, including “café” and the unnecessary capitals in “Rose Garden” and “Fountain”.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and verb forms occur frequently enough to affect fluency. Examples include “park had two different ways for entry”, which needs an article and a more natural structure, and “Fountain replaces by Rose Garden”, where the passive form should be used. “Left side had also seats before a Rose Garden” is also difficult to interpret because the sentence structure and reference are unclear. Several fragments, including “A stage for musicians on the west side of the Fountain,” are not complete sentences. Practise accurate passive constructions and use complete sentences with articles and clear subjects.
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