Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given image is about two plans of a public park in two different times-one is in 1920 and another is today.The name of the park is Grange Park.It was first opened in 1920.It has changed so much.In 1920,the middle area of the park was a beautiful water fountain but now it is replaced with a rose garden.There are seats in every side of this rose garden.This park has two entrance one is from Arnold Avenue and another is from Eldon Street.There were in total three rose gardens in 1920 but now it reduced to two including that middle rose garden.There was also a pond for water plants which is now changed into play area for the children.Near this play area,a cafe is also situated.The glasshouse that existed in 1920 is removed and a water feature is built in that place.In today's plan,we can see amphitheatre for concerts but in 1920 this place was for a stage for musicians.So,these are some changes we can report by looking both plans.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify several important changes accurately, including the central fountain becoming a rose garden with seats around it, the pond becoming a children’s play area, and the glasshouse being replaced by a water feature. You also compare the former musicians’ stage with today’s concert amphitheatre. However, the response has no clear overview that groups the main transformations, and some details are incomplete: for example, it says there are two rose gardens today without clarifying that the north-west garden remains while the central garden is new. The entrances are described, but other notable changes, such as the underground car-park entrance, are omitted. A more explicit overview and fuller selection of key changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly sensible sequence, moving from the central area to the entrances and then around other features, so the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, with no distinct overview or grouping of related changes. Linking is also repetitive and sometimes mechanical: several sentences begin with “There was” or “This,” and the closing phrase “So, these are some changes we can report” adds little information. Some references, such as “this place,” require the reader to infer which location is meant. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and supporting details, and connect changes by location or by what was replaced to create clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of relevant vocabulary, including “rose garden,” “pond for water plants,” “glasshouse,” “water feature,” and “amphitheatre for concerts.” These terms allow you to report the main map features, and “replaced” and “changed into” help express transformations. However, some wording is imprecise or repetitive: “changed so much” is vague, while “in every side” and “reduced to two” are not natural choices for describing the layout. “Beautiful” is subjective and unnecessary in an objective map summary. More precise language for location and change, such as “on all sides,” “decreased in number,” and “was converted into,” would improve clarity and formality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple sentences and more complex comparisons, for example, “There was also a pond for water plants which is now changed into play area for the children.” The main meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors recur. There are agreement and article problems in “two entrance” and “a play area,” and the tense in “which is now changed” should be adjusted to describe a completed change. Several sentences run together without spaces after full stops, as in “today.The name” and “1920.It,” which weakens punctuation control. The response also relies heavily on short, similarly structured statements. Check articles, plural forms, and past-versus-present descriptions, and combine ideas using accurate relative clauses or contrast structures.

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