Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plans give information about the Grange park from now and when it was opened for public in 1920.

Overall, Grange park has changed significantly in recent years. Currently, fountain and pond for water plants are being replaced by rose garden and play area for children, while the two entrances of the park remains the same.

The park's two entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street have remained the same. However, the park now has an underground car park and a right-side of entrance of Eldon street was constructed for car park.

Once inside the park from Eldon Street entrance, the central feature used to be a fountain, which has now been replaced by arose garden sourrounded by seats. TO the right of the Eldon Street entrance , a water feature has been added, taking the place of previous glass house and seating area. A cafe and children's play area now occupy the space where the rose garden and pond for water plants used to be, opposite the water feature.

The park's left side which previously housed a stage for musicians, now features an amphitheatre, The only unchanged feature in this areais the rose garden on the Arnold Avenue side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main transformation and provide a clear overall comparison: the central fountain becomes a rose garden, and the pond area becomes a children’s play area. You also cover the amphitheatre, café, water feature and entrances, so the response addresses the task. However, some details are incomplete or unclear. The overview says the entrances remain the same, but does not mention other important changes, such as the underground car-park entrance or the removal of the glasshouse. The description of the café and play area as being “opposite the water feature” is not a precise account of their locations. To strengthen the report, summarise the main changes more comprehensively and describe locations in relation to the park’s north, south, east and west sides.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to descriptions of the entrances and individual areas. This gives the reader a generally coherent account, and phrases such as “However” and “Once inside” help connect ideas. At times, though, the progression is not fully controlled: the entrances are mentioned in both the overview and the next paragraph, while the final paragraph shifts to the western area without a clear transition. Some references, including “the right-side of entrance” and “opposite the water feature,” make spatial relationships harder to follow. Organise the details consistently by area—for example, north, centre, west and south-east—and use clear linking phrases to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing a park plan, including “replaced,” “occupy,” “central feature” and “amphitheatre.” These choices help communicate the main changes, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, such as “opened for public,” “a right-side of entrance” and “taking the place of previous glass house.” There are also spelling and form errors, including “arose” for “a rose,” “sourrounded” and “areais.” Use standard map-description phrases such as “opened to the public,” “to the right of the entrance” and “in place of the former glasshouse.” Proofreading spelling and spacing would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including the contrast in “while the two entrances…” and the relative clause “where the rose garden and pond… used to be.” Most of the intended meaning can be understood, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the two entrances … remains” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “when it was opened for public” needs an article and a more suitable construction. The sentence beginning “The park’s left side…” also has a comma splice between two independent clauses. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “TO” and the comma before “a water feature.” Check agreement, articles and sentence boundaries, and separate the final clauses with a full stop or conjunction.

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