Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The provided plans depict how the public park is transformed as compare to what it was in 1920.

Overall, the park underwent significant changes, where the most prominent is the development of cafe and children's play area inplace of rose garden and pond for plants in the top right side. Moreover, the Glasshouse is now replaced by the water feature in the bottom right corner.

Looking into the details, starting from the top, the entrance in the middle remiain unchanged. Whereas, seats from the left side are removed and rose garden and pond for plants are replaced by cafe and children's play area. Moving to the middle part, the fountain in the center is replaced by the central rose garden having seats installed around each side. Furthermore, stage for musicians is modified and know named as Amphitheatre for concerts.

Turning to the remaining part, the bottom part also experienced many changes, with Glasshouse replaced by the water feature. Although the entrance at bottom remained same, rose gardens and seats beside it are removed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main transformation clearly, including the new café and play area, the central rose garden with surrounding seats, and the replacement of the glasshouse by a water feature. The overview also recognises that the park changed substantially, and most locations are reported accurately. Some details, however, are incomplete or imprecise: the café replaced a rose garden, not rose gardens generally, and the north-west rose garden remains. The statement that seats on the left were removed is too broad, since the amphitheatre occupies the western area and some seating arrangements changed rather than simply disappearing. You also omit the underground car-park entrance and do not clearly describe the amphitheatre’s location. More precise coverage of these features would make the account more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs moving from the northern area through the centre to the southern area. This gives the reader a logical route through the plans, and linking expressions such as “Looking into the details” and “Turning to the remaining part” signal progression. The organisation is generally effective, though some transitions feel formulaic, and “Whereas” begins a fragment rather than connecting a complete contrast. The repeated use of “replaced” also makes the description less fluid. You could improve cohesion by grouping changes by location and using clearer references—for example, distinguishing the rose garden that remains from the one replaced by the café.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of map vocabulary, including “transformed,” “central,” “corner,” “replaced,” and “remained,” so the main changes are understandable. There are also attempts at more specific terms, such as “Amphitheatre for concerts.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “as compare to” and “inplace of” do not fit naturally, while “pond for plants” is less precise than the map label “pond for water plants.” “Modified and know named” is unclear, and “bottom part” is vague. Spelling errors such as “remiain” and “know” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise location language and natural collocations, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including contrast clauses with “Although” and “Whereas” and participial openings such as “Looking into the details.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “as compare to what it was” has an incorrect verb form, and “the most prominent is the development” does not agree smoothly with the past-time description. “Whereas, seats from the left side are removed” is an incomplete construction, while “the entrance at bottom remained same” is missing articles. Tense use also shifts between past and present when describing the plans. Use consistent past forms for changes and present forms for features that remain, and check sentence completeness and articles.

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